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The bar charts below give information about the railway system in six cities in Europe. v.1

The bar charts below give information about the railway system in six cities in Europe. v. 1
The diagrams present information on six railways in six European cities. Overall, Paris has the oldest and largest rail system while Lisbon serves the highest number of train commuters. According to the illustration, Paris railway was established in 1863 and it now has around 400 km routes. Stockholm, the second oldest and second largest train system, was built in 1900 and expands it route to around 200 km. Lisbon and Rome train systems were inaugurated in 1927 and 1976 respectively. They have rail tracks of 155 and 126 km consecutively. Madrid has the smallest rail tracks, only 11 km, and they came into existence in 1981. Berlin train system was introduced as recently as 2001 and it has 28 km route in total. Lisbon train station serves the largest number of commuters per year - almost 200 million. Nearly half of these train passengers travel in Stockholm while Paris, despite having the oldest and largest train system, facilitates only 775 million people per year. Rome with its 144 million yearly passengers serves almost three times higher travellers than that of Madrid and Berlin train authorities.
The diagrams present information on six railways in six European cities.
Overall
, Paris has the oldest and largest rail
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system
while Lisbon serves the highest number of
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train
commuters.

According to the illustration, Paris railway
was established
in 1863 and it
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now
has around 400 km routes. Stockholm, the second oldest and second largest
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train
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system
,
was built
in 1900 and expands it route to around 200 km. Lisbon and Rome
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train
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systems
were inaugurated
in 1927 and 1976
respectively
. They have rail
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tracks
of 155 and 126 km
consecutively
. Madrid has the smallest rail
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tracks
,
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only
11 km, and they came into existence in 1981. Berlin
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train
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system
was introduced
as recently as 2001 and it has 28 km route in total.

Lisbon
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train
station serves the largest number of commuters per year
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almost 200 million.
Nearly
half of these
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train
passengers travel in Stockholm while Paris, despite having the oldest and largest
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train
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system
, facilitates
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only
775 million
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people
per year. Rome with its 144 million yearly passengers serves almost three times higher
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travellers
than that of Madrid and Berlin
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train
authorities.
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IELTS academic The bar charts below give information about the railway system in six cities in Europe. v. 1

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6.0
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