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The graphs show changes in spending habits of people in the UK between 1971 and 2001. v.1

The graphs show changes in spending habits of people in the UK between 1971 and 2001. v. 1
The pie charts illustrate the changes in household spending in the UK between 1971 and 2001. It is clear that the cost of petrol made up the largest proportion of the household spending in 1971 while expenditure on cars was the greatest share of the household spending in 2001. British spent more than one-third of their money on petrol and almost a third to purchase furniture followed by money spent in restaurants, which was precisely a quarter. The least proportion of expenditure was for computers, which accounted for 7% of total expenses by Brits in 1971. After 30 years, British citizens spent significantly less portion to buy petrol, furniture and restaurant meals - 8%, 8%, 14% respectively. In comparison to 1971, they spent nearly double on computers. The largest proportion of household spending was made on owing cars with more than 40% total expenses. The proportion of expenditure on food was 14%. Finally, for books, it was considerably small, only one percent of total costs in 2001.
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in the UK between 1971 and 2001. It is
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that the cost of petrol made up the largest
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household
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spending
in 1971 while expenditure on cars was the greatest share of the
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household
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in 2001.

British
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more than one-third of their money on petrol and almost a third to
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purchase
furniture followed by money
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spent
in restaurants, which was
precisely
a quarter. The least
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proportion
of expenditure was for computers, which accounted for 7% of total expenses by Brits in 1971.

After 30 years, British citizens
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spent
significantly
less portion to
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buy
petrol, furniture and restaurant meals
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8%, 8%, 14%
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spent
nearly
double on computers. The largest
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proportion
of
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household
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spending
was made
on owing cars with more than 40% total expenses. The
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of expenditure on food was 14%.
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, for books, it was
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small
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one percent of total costs in 2001.
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IELTS academic The graphs show changes in spending habits of people in the UK between 1971 and 2001. v. 1

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3 paragraphs
167 words
6.5
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