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The bar chart below shows the average Australian water consumption in selected cities for last year. The pie chart shows the distribution of Australian water consumption for last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, v.2

The bar chart below shows the average Australian water consumption in selected cities for last year. The pie chart shows the distribution of Australian water consumption for last year.
The bar chart illustrates the average Australian water use in 6 selected cities for last year, while the pie chart describes the share of water each industry consumed in 2014. Overall, Perth had the highest average water use for last year with 300 kilolitres per property, followed by Adelaide and Brisbane with 240 and 250 kilolitres of property respectively. On the other hand, Melbourne and Canberra showed the lowest average water consumption of 150 and 140 kilolitres respectively. Taking a look at the distribution of water use by industries, we can clearly see that Agriculture took over two thirds of the entire consumption 67%, followed by households 9%. Water Supply, Sewage and Drainage industry consumed the same amount of water as the Electricity sector, 7%. In the same way there was no difference between the consumption of Manufacturing and Other industries, with both sectors using 4% of the national water supply. The smallest user was the Mining industry, accounting for just 2% of Australian water use. To conclude, the city of Perth and the Agriculture industry had a major impact on the usage of Australian water.
The bar chart illustrates the average Australian
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water
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use
in 6 selected cities for last year, while the pie chart
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describes
the share of
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water
each
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industry
consumed in 2014.

Overall
, Perth had the highest average
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water
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use
for last year with 300
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kilolitres
per property, followed by Adelaide and Brisbane with 240 and 250
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kilolitres
of property
respectively
.
On the other hand
, Melbourne and Canberra
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showed
the lowest average
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consumption of 150 and 140
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kilolitres
respectively
.

Taking a look at the distribution of
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water
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use
by
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industries
, we can
clearly
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see
that Agriculture took over two thirds of the entire consumption 67%, followed by households 9%.
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Water
Supply, Sewage and Drainage
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industry
consumed the same amount of
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water
as the Electricity sector, 7%.
In the same way
there was no difference between the consumption of Manufacturing and Other
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industries
, with both sectors using 4% of the national
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water
supply. The smallest user was the Mining
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industry
, accounting for
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just
2% of Australian
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water
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use
.

To conclude
, the city of Perth and the Agriculture
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industry
had a major impact on the usage of Australian
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water
.
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16Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS academic The bar chart below shows the average Australian water consumption in selected cities for last year. The pie chart shows the distribution of Australian water consumption for last year.

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