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The two column charts show the percentage of food and other items bought by 3 European countries in 1998 and 2008 v.2

The two column charts show the percentage of food and other items bought by 3 European countries in 1998 and 2008 v. 2
The given charts demonstrate the expense people in 3 Europe nations spent in foods and other goods between 1998 and 2008. It is evident that people in Norway spent bought the largest percent of food while Poland residents mostly bought other items. UK was the coutries where people bought the least food and other items. In term of food, in 1998, Norway bought the biggest propotion of food, at exactly 15%, followed by Poland where nearly 8% of food was bought. UK was the nations that people only bought 5% of food. After 10 - year period, the percentage of food bought by 3 countries increased. The food bought by Norway and Poland was triple, at aroung 45% and 30% respectively. Although the proportion of food in UK rose five fold, at 25% but UK was a country that bought the smallest number of food. On the other hand, in 1998, Poland citizens bought the largest number of other items, which was 35%. This number in Norway and UK was only 7% and 3% respectively. In 2008, the percentage of other items bought in Poland reached 35%, followed by Norway at 15% and UK at 18%.
The
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charts demonstrate the expense
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people
in 3 Europe nations spent in
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foods
and
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other
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goods
between 1998 and 2008.

It is evident that
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people
in Norway spent
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bought
the largest percent of
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food
while Poland residents
mostly
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bought
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other
items. UK was the
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coutries
where
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people
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bought
the least
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food
and
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other
items.

In term of
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food
, in 1998, Norway
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bought
the biggest
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propotion
of
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food
, at exactly 15%, followed by Poland where
nearly
8% of
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food
was
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bought
. UK was the nations that
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people
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only
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bought
5% of
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food
. After 10
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-
year period, the percentage of
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food
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bought
by 3 countries increased. The
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food
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bought
by Norway and Poland was triple, at
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aroung
45% and 30%
respectively
. Although the proportion of
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food
in UK rose five
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fold
, at 25%
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but
UK was a country that
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bought
the smallest number of food.

On the
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other
hand, in 1998, Poland citizens
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bought
the largest number of
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other
items, which was 35%. This number in Norway and UK was
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only
7% and 3%
respectively
. In 2008, the percentage of
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other
items
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bought
in Poland reached 35%, followed by Norway at 15% and UK at 18%.
1Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
20Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Mistakes
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IELTS academic The two column charts show the percentage of food and other items bought by 3 European countries in 1998 and 2008 v. 2

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4 paragraphs
196 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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