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The pie chart below shows the proportion of different categories of families living in poverty in the UK in 2002. v.1

The pie chart below shows the proportion of different categories of families living in poverty in the UK in 2002. v. 1
The pie chart outlines the percentages of poor family types in the United Kingdom in 2002. Generally speaking, 14% British households were insolvent in 2002 and half of those poor families were sole parents and singles without any child. As can be seen, 26% sole parents in the United Kingdom were economically insolvent in 2002 and this was the highest ratio for the poor British family types. Poverty was prevalent among the singles without children as 24% of them were under the poverty line. These two types of households accounted for half of the total poverty-stricken families in the UK in 2002. Couples with children had greater poverty rate than couples without children. While the 15% former family types witnessed economic misfortune, the latter accounted for 9% of such households. It is worth noticing that ages British had fewer poverty rates than their younger counterparts. One in twenty aged couples had to go through financial hardships while it was 7% for the single aged person.
The pie chart outlines the percentages of poor
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in the United Kingdom in 2002.
Generally
speaking, 14% British households were insolvent in 2002 and half of those poor
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families
were sole parents and singles without any child.

As can be
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, 26% sole parents in the United Kingdom were
economically
insolvent in 2002 and this was the highest ratio for the poor British
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family
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types
.
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Poverty
was prevalent among the singles without children as 24% of them were under the
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poverty
line. These two
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types
of households accounted for half of the total poverty-stricken
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families
in the UK in 2002.

Couples with children had greater
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poverty
rate than couples without children. While the 15% former
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family
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types
witnessed economic misfortune, the latter accounted for 9% of such households. It is worth noticing that ages British had fewer
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poverty
rates than their younger counterparts. One in twenty aged couples had to go through financial hardships while it was 7% for the single aged person.
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IELTS academic The pie chart below shows the proportion of different categories of families living in poverty in the UK in 2002. v. 1

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