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The pie charts compare the production of various agricultural products between two areas of the country. Each region develops different major food. v.2

The pie charts compare the production of various agricultural products between two areas of the country. Each region develops different major food. v. 2
The two given bar charts illustrate the proportion of various agricultural products in two particular areas of the nation. Overall, it is clear to see that the percentage of vegetables and grain in the East is very different from those in Western Region. Besides, meat products occupies the same rate in both areas. In the East of the country, vegetables is the most popular product with about 20% of production. In contrast, it is the least popular product with a very small number, only 5% in the West. Grain in the East has the smallest percentage 15% of all agricultural products while in the Western side, they produce three times those, about 45%. The percentage of meat at both regions is exactly the same, over a third of all products. Meanwhile, the West has 15% of dairy products and the East has twice times the percentage of dairy products than the West.
The two
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bar charts illustrate the proportion of various agricultural
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products
in two particular areas of the nation.

Overall
, it is
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clear
to
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see
that the
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percentage
of vegetables and grain in the East is
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very
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different
from those in Western Region.
Besides
, meat
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products
occupies the same rate in both areas.

In the East of the country, vegetables is the most popular
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product
with about 20% of production.
In contrast
, it is the least popular
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product
with a
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very
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small
number,
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only
5% in the West. Grain in the East has the smallest
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percentage
15% of all agricultural
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products
while in the Western side, they produce three times those, about 45%.

The
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percentage
of meat at both regions is exactly the same, over a third of all
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products
. Meanwhile, the West has 15% of dairy
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products
and the East has twice times the
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percentage
of dairy
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products
than the West.
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IELTS academic The pie charts compare the production of various agricultural products between two areas of the country. Each region develops different major food. v. 2

Academic
  American English
4 paragraphs
152 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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Task Achievement: 7.0
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