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The table below shows the figures for imprisonment in five countries between 1930 and 1980. v.2

The table below shows the figures for imprisonment in five countries between 1930 and 1980. v. 2
The bar chart depicts the number of imprisonment measured in thousands from 1930 to 1980 in five respective countries which are the Great Britain, Australia, New Zealand, United States, and Canada. Based on the chart, it can be seen that Great Britain showed an increasing trend in term of the number of imprisonment over the 50 years. It showed a dramatic rise from 1930 to 1980 with the figure recorded initially at 30 thousands in 1930 and in 1980, the figure was almost tripled to below 90 thousands. As for Australia, the number of imprisonment was fluctuated over the years from nearly 70 thousands in 1930 to above 50 thousands in 1980. Another country, New Zealand, showed a dramatic fall in 1940 from approximately 100 thousands in 1930 to above 50 thousands in 1940. This was a doubled fall and it remained constant in 1950 before rising back to around 80 thousands in 1980. The United States reflected a similar pattern as the Australia in which its figures fluctuated over the years and reached a peak in 1980. The initial figure showed in the chart was about 100 thousands in 1930 and by 1980, the number of imprisonment arouse significantly to about 140 thousands in 1980. Last but not least, the trend of Canada in term of the number of imprisonment was a downward trend with a little bit of fluctuation between 1940 and 1970. There was a quarter drop from 1930 to 1980 in which the figures were 120 thousands and above 90 thousands respectively.
The bar chart depicts the
number
of
imprisonment
measured in thousands from 1930 to 1980 in five respective countries which are the Great Britain, Australia, New Zealand, United States, and Canada.

Based on the chart, it can be
seen
that Great Britain
showed
an increasing trend in term of the
number
of
imprisonment
over the 50 years. It
showed
a dramatic rise from 1930 to 1980 with the
figure
recorded
initially
at 30 thousands in 1930 and in 1980, the
figure
was almost tripled to below 90 thousands. As for Australia, the
number
of
imprisonment
was fluctuated
over the years from
nearly
70 thousands in 1930 to above 50 thousands in 1980. Another country, New Zealand,
showed
a dramatic fall in 1940 from approximately 100 thousands in 1930 to above 50 thousands in 1940. This was a doubled fall and it remained constant in 1950
before
rising back to around 80 thousands in 1980. The United States reflected a similar pattern as the Australia in which its
figures
fluctuated over the years and reached a peak in 1980. The initial
figure
showed
in the chart was about 100 thousands in 1930 and by 1980, the
number
of
imprisonment
arouse
significantly
to about 140 thousands in 1980. Last
but
not least, the trend of Canada in term of the
number
of
imprisonment
was a downward trend with a
little bit
of fluctuation between 1940 and 1970. There was a quarter drop from 1930 to 1980 in which the
figures
were 120 thousands and above 90 thousands
respectively
.
0Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
19Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes

IELTS academic The table below shows the figures for imprisonment in five countries between 1930 and 1980. v. 2

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