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The pie charts give information about the farming products in two various areas of the country. The percentage of 4 products varied in 2 regions. v.2

The pie charts give information about the farming products in two various areas of the country. The percentage of 4 products varied in 2 regions. v. 2

In eastern region, farmer produce nearly similar percentage of 4 products. meat accounted for 35% of the production. dairy placed second with 30% and vegetables rank third with 20%. The lowest proportion belonged to grain with 15% of total production. There was a big difference between the agricultural production in Western region. In contrast with eastern one, grain made up the largest percentage with 45% in the West. There was also 35% of meat produced in this area while dairy ratio was only 15%. The proportion of vegetables was the lowest of only 5%. In general, meat and grain were 2 main agricultural products in both area whilst vegetables and dairy production were almost the same or lower.

In eastern region, farmer produce nearly
 similar percentage of 4 products. This sentence does not start with an uppercase letterMeat
meat
 accounted for 35% of the production. This sentence does not start with an uppercase letterDairy
dairy
 placed second with 30% and vegetables rank third with 20%. The lowest proportion belonged to grain with 15% of total production.

There was a This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:hugeenormousgiganticvast
big
 difference between the agricultural production in Western region. In contrast
 with eastern one, grain made up the largest percentage with 45% in the West. There was also
 35% of meat produced in this area while dairy ratio was This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :exclusively
only
 15%. The proportion of vegetables was the lowest of This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :exclusively
only
 5%.

In general
, meat and grain were 2 main agricultural products in both area whilst vegetables and dairy production were almost the same or lower. 

3Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS academic The pie charts give information about the farming products in two various areas of the country. The percentage of 4 products varied in 2 regions. v. 2

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American English

3 paragraphs

118 words

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4.0

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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

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Lexical Resource: 6.5

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Grammatical Range: 6.0

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Task Achievement: 5.5

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