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The pie chart below show the main reasons why agricultural land becomes less productive. The table shows how these causes affected three regions of the world during the 1990. Causes of land degradation by region v.1

The pie chart below show the main reasons why agricultural land becomes less productive. The table shows how these causes affected three regions of the world during the 1990. Causes of land degradation by region v. 1
The pictorial layout illustrates the main cause of worldwide land degradation however, the tabular chart represents how these factors affected the land of three countries in 1990. Having a look on the cause of overgrazing 35% land was less productive by to this while, the second place was deforestation, it was 5% lesser than the former reason. It has followed by the overcultivation, this was almost same with the deforestation about 28%. Moving to the other chart into consideration, in Europe 9. 8% land demolished due to the cutting of trees as well as over-cultivation and overgrazing was 7. 7, 5. 5 respectively. Oceania has the total degradation of 13% and this was 10% lesser than the Europe over-cultivation was a negligible reason in Oceania however, total land affected in North America about one in twenty. Other reasons such as, Over-cultivation 3. 3% and overgrazing was 5. 5%. Overall, the main cause of land degradation was overgrazing and Europe badly affected by different reasons.
The pictorial layout illustrates the main cause of worldwide
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degradation
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, the tabular chart represents how these factors
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of three countries in 1990.

Having a look on the cause of overgrazing 35%
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was less productive by to this while, the second place was deforestation, it was 5% lesser than the former
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overcultivation
, this was almost same with the deforestation about 28%.

Moving to the other chart into consideration, in Europe 9. 8%
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demolished due to the cutting of trees
as well
as over-cultivation and overgrazing was 7. 7, 5. 5
respectively
. Oceania has the total degradation of 13% and this was 10% lesser than the Europe over-cultivation was a negligible
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reason
in Oceania
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land
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in North America about one in twenty. Other
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such as, Over-cultivation 3. 3% and overgrazing was 5. 5%.

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degradation was overgrazing and Europe
badly
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IELTS academic The pie chart below show the main reasons why agricultural land becomes less productive. The table shows how these causes affected three regions of the world during the 1990. Causes of land degradation by region v. 1

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6.5
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