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The two pie charts below show changes in world population by region between 1910 and 2010. v.1

The two pie charts below show changes in world population by region between 1910 and 2010. v. 1
The pie charts compare the population distribution in different regions of the world in 1910 and 2010 and also depicts the changes in global population in these territories. A glance at the diagrams reveals that more than half of the world citizens resided in Asia, both in 1910 and 2010, and the ratio of the global population division decreased in Asia and Europe in a century. According to the given illustration, in 1910, the global inhabitants was 1. 7 billion which overwhelmingly increased and reached to 6 billion in just 100 years. Six out of every ten persons, in 1910, lived in Asia, making it the region with exactly 60% global people. Then Europe and Russia comprised one-fourth of the global citizenry while 3% and 5% of the global community lived in Latin America and North America. Finally, the lowest percentage of the population allotment could be observed in Latin America and African region had one and a half percent more citizen share in this year. After a century, 2010, to be exact, the population diffusion in different parts of the world changes. More than half of the world population were in Asia, though it is precisely six percent fewer than that of a century back. North America's percentages of the population remained unchanged but made it the continent with the lowest percentage of the world population which was previously held by the Latin America. Interestingly, population distribution in Europe and Russia dropped to almost half while it more than doubled in Latin America and Africa. Finally, six percent people lived in the Middle East and North Africa in 2010 though no data was given for this region explicitly in the first pie chart.
The pie charts compare the
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in 1910 and 2010 and
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in these territories. A glance at the diagrams reveals that more than
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citizens resided in Asia, both in 1910 and 2010, and the ratio of the
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division decreased in Asia and Europe in a century.

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inhabitants was 1. 7 billion which
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100 years. Six out of every ten persons, in 1910,
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in Asia, making it the
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with exactly 60%
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. Then Europe and Russia comprised one-fourth of the
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citizenry while 3% and 5% of the
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community
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America and North America.
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allotment could
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America and African
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had one and a
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percent more citizen share in this year.

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diffusion in
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were in Asia, though it is
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six percent fewer than that of a century back. North America's percentages of the
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remained unchanged
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made it the continent with the lowest percentage of the
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which was previously held by the
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America.
Interestingly
,
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distribution in Europe and Russia dropped to almost
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while it more than doubled in
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America and Africa.
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, six percent
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in the Middle East and North Africa in 2010 though no data was
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IELTS academic The two pie charts below show changes in world population by region between 1910 and 2010. v. 1

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