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The pie charts below show the percentages of each material thrown out by the average household in California in 1985 and 2002. v.2

The pie charts below show the percentages of each material thrown out by the average household in California in 1985 and 2002. v. 2
The graphs compare the amount of 8 different waste products produced by typical households in California in two separate years, 1985 and 2002. Overall, of the eight waste materials thrown out wood, glass, papers and metals' figures are the only ones that increased, whereas the proportion for textile, kitchen/organic waste and dust and cinders decreased significantly. It is also noticeable that the percentage for plastic remained stable over a 17 year period. The numbers for both glass and metals showed a significant rise of 10% in 2002 to 12% and 16% respectively. Papers were the most common waste product in both years, which percentage rose from just over a third to 44%, while the amount of wood displayed a negligible growth of 1% in 2002. Among the 3 categories of household wastes that declined, kitchen/organic waste had the most dramatic drop from 28% to 4% in 2002. Dust and cinders comprised the next highest reduction in percentage and fell by 4%, and textile dropped by only 1%. The figure for plastic maintained the same with 7% after 17 years.
The graphs compare the amount of 8
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products produced by typical households in California in two separate years, 1985 and 2002.

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materials thrown out wood, glass, papers and
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ones that increased, whereas the proportion for textile, kitchen/organic
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and dust and cinders decreased
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a significant rise of 10% in 2002 to 12% and 16%
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. Papers were the most common
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product in both years, which percentage rose from
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over a third to 44%, while the amount of wood displayed a negligible growth of 1% in 2002.

Among the 3 categories of household
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that declined, kitchen/organic
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had the most dramatic drop from 28% to 4% in 2002. Dust and cinders comprised the
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highest reduction in percentage and fell by 4%, and textile dropped by
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1%. The figure for plastic maintained the same with 7% after 17 years.
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IELTS academic The pie charts below show the percentages of each material thrown out by the average household in California in 1985 and 2002. v. 2

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