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The diagram below shows information about member attendance at various clubs in a metro city Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant v.2

The diagram below shows information about member attendance at various clubs in a metro city
The supplied bar graph enumerates the presence of the members at numerous clubs in a metro city for a seven month period. The highlighting feature is the attendance of members at American Club. As it is observed from the data, there was a mild rise in the visits of individuals at French Club from January to July. It was at its peak in July by well nigh to 78, 000 visitors. Whereas the figure of visitors remained the same throughout these seven months at British Club. It was nearly 60, 000 visitors per month. To continue with, the number of members show dramatic fluctuations at Japanese Club in the bar graph. It touched the bottom in January with nearly 40, 000 members and hit a high point in April with approximately 50, 000 visitors. Moreover, the American Club reached a peak in June with nearly 98, 000 visitors. Whereas in July it decreased with nearly 15, 000 visitors at American Club. All in all, the feeblest visits made by visitors at Japanese Club in January whereas the maximal visits was at American Club by visitors in June.
The supplied bar graph enumerates the presence of the
members
at numerous
clubs
in a metro city for a
seven month
period. The highlighting feature is the attendance of
members
at American Club.

As it
is observed
from the data, there was a mild rise in the visits of individuals at French
Club
from January to July. It was at its peak in July by
well nigh
to 78, 000
visitors
.
Whereas
the figure of
visitors
remained the same throughout these seven months at British
Club
. It was
nearly
60, 000
visitors
per month.

To continue with, the number of
members
show
dramatic fluctuations at Japanese
Club
in the bar graph. It touched the bottom in January with
nearly
40, 000
members
and hit a high point in April with approximately 50, 000
visitors
.
Moreover
, the American
Club
reached a peak in June with
nearly
98, 000
visitors
. Whereas in July it decreased with
nearly
15, 000
visitors
at American Club.

All in all, the feeblest visits made by
visitors
at Japanese
Club
in January whereas the maximal visits was at American
Club
by
visitors
in June.
1Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
23Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS academic The diagram below shows information about member attendance at various clubs in a metro city

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4 paragraphs
187 words
6.0
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