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The graph below shows the unemployment rates in the US and Japan between March 1993 and March 1999. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below. v.6

The graph below shows the unemployment rates in the US and Japan between March 1993 and March 1999. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below. v. 6
The supplied line chart enumerates the rate of unemployment in two different countries from the year 1993 to 1999. The striking feature is that both the countries depict opposite trend during these six years. As it is observed from the data, USA was at its maximal in unemployment in march 1993 with 7%. After this, it represents the declining trend till march 1995 and was at 5. 5%. Afterwards, it shows a mild plunged upto march 1996. Later, the rate of unemployment was at its lowest point in march 1999 with 4%. To continue with, Japan touched the bottom degree of unemployed workers in march 1993 with less than 2%. Subsequently, it went on increasing with a constant rate. It rose to 3. 5% in march 1996. Till march 1998, it remains unchanged at 3. 5% with minor fluctuations. It reached at a peak in march 1999 with 4. 6%. All in all, the percent of unemployment in Japan is at the topmost in march 1999 whereas in USA, it is at its feeblest point in 1999.
The supplied line chart enumerates the rate of
unemployment
in two
different
countries from the year 1993 to 1999. The striking feature is that both the countries depict opposite trend during these six years.

As it
is observed
from the data, USA was at its maximal in
unemployment
in
march
1993 with 7%. After this, it represents the declining trend till
march
1995 and was at 5. 5%. Afterwards, it
shows
a mild plunged
upto
march
1996. Later, the rate of
unemployment
was at its lowest point in
march
1999 with 4%.

To continue with, Japan touched the bottom degree of unemployed workers in
march
1993 with less than 2%.
Subsequently
, it went on increasing with a constant rate. It rose to 3. 5% in
march
1996. Till
march
1998, it remains unchanged at 3. 5% with minor fluctuations. It reached at a peak in
march
1999 with 4. 6%.

All in all, the percent of
unemployment
in Japan is at the topmost in
march
1999 whereas
in USA
, it is at its feeblest point in 1999.
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4Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
11Mistakes

IELTS academic The graph below shows the unemployment rates in the US and Japan between March 1993 and March 1999. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below. v. 6

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4 paragraphs
177 words
6.0
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