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The pie charts below show the coffee production, coffee consumption and the profit distribution around the world. v.2

The pie charts below show the coffee production, coffee consumption and the profit distribution around the world. v. 2
The three pie charts give information about global coffee production, consumption and profit from numerous coffee-related businesses. Overall, Europeans and Americans drink the highest amount of coffee while South Africa is the biggest producer. Additionally, the coffee delivery service is the most profitable business among those compared. To begin with, citizens of Europe and America consume coffee four times as much as the rest of the world. Japan, whose production accounts for 18% internationally, only consume a mere 8% of global coffee. It is worth noticing that South Africa produces 44% of the coffee (more than anywhere else), which is exactly double than the coffee production in Indonesia - the country that makes the second-largest coffee. Along with South Africa, Indonesia and Japan, Vietnam also harvests coffee and the amount is 16%. Regarding profit distribution, it can be seen that more than half of it goes to the coffee delivery industry. Retailers get approximately a quarter while the figure for coffee producers' profit is only 15 per cent. The remaining 10 per cent is what exporters receive.
The three pie charts give information about global
coffee
production, consumption and profit from numerous coffee-related businesses.

Overall
, Europeans and Americans drink the highest amount of
coffee
while South Africa is the biggest producer.
Additionally
, the
coffee
delivery service is the most profitable business among those compared.

To
begin
with, citizens of Europe and America consume
coffee
four times as much as the rest of the world. Japan, whose production accounts for 18%
internationally
,
only
consume a mere 8% of global coffee.

It is worth noticing that South Africa produces 44% of the
coffee
(more than anywhere else), which is exactly double than the
coffee
production in Indonesia
-
the country that
makes
the second-largest
coffee
. Along with South Africa, Indonesia and Japan, Vietnam
also
harvests
coffee
and the amount is 16%.

Regarding profit distribution, it can be
seen
that more than half of it goes to the
coffee
delivery industry. Retailers
get
approximately a quarter while the figure for
coffee
producers' profit is
only
15 per cent. The remaining 10 per cent is what exporters receive.
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