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The charts below show the growth in the population in some of the world’s largest cities as well as the population distribution in urban and rural areas. v.2

The charts below show the growth in the population in some of the world’s largest cities as well as the population distribution in urban and rural areas. v. 2
The bar graph compares the population growth in five large cities between 1970 and 2010 while the table lists down the five most populous cities in the world both in 1950 and 2010. In addition, the line graph analyses the global population in rural and urban areas. Overall, Tokyo had the largest population in 2010 but the population growth in Bombay and Jakarta outranked other cities. Finally, more people started to live in cities after 2005 despite a different scenario in earlier years. As the data suggests, Tokyo had over 15 million residents in 1970 which was three and five times higher than that of Bombay and Jakarta respectively. New York and Shanghai had approximately 14 and 12 million inhabitants in this year. After two decades, New York witnessed a meagre population growth while it was dramatic both in Jakarta and Bombay. It is evident that population growth in Jakarta and Bombay exceeded all other cities. In 1950, New York, London, Tokyo, Paris and Moskow were the top five populous cities in the world. In 2010 Bombay, Lagos, Shanghai and Jakarta ranked in the list by eliminating all other cites except Tokyo which stood first on the chart with over 27 million citizens. Finally, the global urban population in 1980 was below 2 billion while 3 billion lived in villages. The population in cities grew steadily and went over  4 billion in 2010 at which point 3 billion global population resided in rural areas.
The bar graph compares the
population
growth
in five large
cities
between 1970 and 2010 while the table lists down the five most populous
cities
in the world both in 1950 and 2010.
In addition
, the line graph analyses the global
population
in rural and urban areas.

Overall
, Tokyo had the largest
population
in 2010
but
the
population
growth
in Bombay and Jakarta outranked other
cities
.
Finally
, more
people
started
to
live
in
cities
after 2005 despite a
different
scenario in earlier years.

As the data suggests, Tokyo had over 15 million residents in 1970 which was three and five times higher than that of Bombay and Jakarta
respectively
. New York and Shanghai had approximately 14 and 12 million inhabitants in this year. After two decades, New York witnessed a
meagre
population
growth
while it was dramatic both in Jakarta and Bombay. It is evident that
population
growth
in Jakarta and Bombay exceeded all other cities.

In 1950, New York, London, Tokyo, Paris and
Moskow
were the top five populous
cities
in the world. In 2010 Bombay, Lagos, Shanghai and Jakarta ranked in the list by eliminating all other cites except Tokyo which stood
first
on the chart with over 27 million citizens.

Finally
, the global urban
population
in 1980 was below 2
billion
while 3
billion
lived
in villages. The
population
in
cities
grew
steadily
and went over
 
4
billion
in 2010 at which point 3
billion
global
population
resided in rural areas.
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23Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS academic The charts below show the growth in the population in some of the world’s largest cities as well as the population distribution in urban and rural areas. v. 2

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