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The graph below shows the percentage of households, grouped by poverty, on the basis of access to refrigerator, electricity and water in Ghana for the year 1991/1992 to 1998/1999. v.1

The graph below shows the percentage of households, grouped by poverty, on the basis of access to refrigerator, electricity and water in Ghana for the year 1991/1992 to 1998/1999. v. 1
The diagram outlines how the electricity, refrigerator and water access to Ghanaians changed in seven years. The data was published by the Ghana Statistics Service in 2000 and admittance to these conveniences is categorized based on the economic conditions of Ghanaians. Overall, solvent people had far better access to these facilities while the availability of electricity and fridges deteriorated for poor Ghanaians. As the bar graph suggests, only 3% meagre citizens in Ghana had access to refrigerators in 1991/1992 despite 48% of them had electricity. Access to electrical energy for very poor declined by 14% after 7 years. However, water access was granted for over half of the scanty people in 91/92 fiscal year while it slightly improved afterwards. Poor Ghanaians’ access to electricity was somewhat better than very poor citizens but in 7 years the scenario deteriorated. Their access to refrigerators was 11% in 1991/92 which reduced by 5% in 1998/99. Moreover, around seven in ten poor citizens received water facilities which remained constant in 98/99. Finally, affluent Ghanaians had better access to these amenities as 85% of them had electric power in 1998/99 compared to 34% destitute Ghanaians access to this facility. Eight out of ten rich people had access to water and their admittance to these resources augmented over the period, unlike poor citizens.
The diagram outlines how the
electricity
, refrigerator and
water
access
to
Ghanaians
changed
in seven years. The data
was published
by the Ghana Statistics Service in 2000 and admittance to these conveniences
is categorized
based on the economic conditions of
Ghanaians
.
Overall
, solvent
people
had far better
access
to these facilities while the availability of
electricity
and fridges deteriorated for
poor
Ghanaians
.

As the bar graph suggests,
only
3%
meagre
citizens
in Ghana had
access
to refrigerators in 1991/1992 despite 48% of them had
electricity
.
Access
to electrical energy for
very
poor
declined by 14% after 7 years.
However
,
water
access
was granted
for over half of the scanty
people
in 91/92 fiscal
year
while it
slightly
improved
afterwards.

Poor
Ghanaians
access
to
electricity
was somewhat better than
very
poor
citizens
but
in 7 years the scenario deteriorated. Their
access
to refrigerators was 11% in 1991/92 which
reduced
by 5% in 1998/99.
Moreover
, around seven in ten
poor
citizens
received
water
facilities which remained constant in 98/99.

Finally
, affluent
Ghanaians
had better
access
to these amenities as 85% of them had electric power in 1998/99 compared to 34% destitute
Ghanaians
access
to this facility. Eight out of ten rich
people
had
access
to
water
and their admittance to these resources augmented over the period, unlike
poor
citizens
.
4Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
28Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes
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IELTS academic The graph below shows the percentage of households, grouped by poverty, on the basis of access to refrigerator, electricity and water in Ghana for the year 1991/1992 to 1998/1999. v. 1

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