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The pie charts below show information on the highest level of education of women in Someland in 1945 and 1995 v.5

The pie charts below show information on the highest level of education of women in Someland in 1945 and 1995 v. 5
The pie charts above give us an detail information about the level of education that reached by women in Someland between the years 1945 and 1995. Overall, the women reach better education in 1995 rather than in 1945. At the beginning in 1945, there were no women in Someland reached post graduate level and only one percent who reached first degree level. Furthermore, the biggest number of woman, 70 %, in this year are no schooling and only third grade level which they share an equal number, 35% for each other. Comparing with data in 1995, there were increasing amount of number woman level of education, especially for first graduate and post graduate which the amount of number are 50% and 20% in respectively. Moreover, in this year, there were no more woman no schooling, third grade, or just until 6th grade. At least they were reached 9th grade which up to 10% of woman population. In summary, women’s schooling level in Someland made a significant improvement over 50 years.
The pie charts above give us
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are no schooling and
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which they share an equal
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, 35% for each other. Comparing with data in 1995, there were increasing amount of
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population.

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made a significant improvement over 50 years.
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IELTS academic The pie charts below show information on the highest level of education of women in Someland in 1945 and 1995 v. 5

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