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The pie charts below indicate the primary uses of the internet in Japan in the years 1995 and 2005. v.1

The pie charts below indicate the primary uses of the internet in Japan in the years 1995 and 2005. v. 1
The pie charts compare the five main reasons for internet use in Japan in two different years, 1995 and 2005. Overall, while the percentage of internet use for work and study increased in 2005, it both decreased for communication and entertainment. It is also noticeable that work remained the major reason for internet usage after 10 years. In 1995, the proportion of people who use the internet for work in Japan was the highest among the other purposes at 31% and rose significantly by 14% to 45% in 2005. Similarly, the figure for people who used the internet for studying went up from over a quarter to 30% over a decade. In terms of communication, the percentage declined slightly from around a fifth in 1995 to just over a tenth in 2005. The figure for entertainment had a more significant reduction from nearly a quarter in 1995 to end with almost the same proportion as communication in 2005 with 13%.
The pie charts compare the five main reasons for internet
use
in Japan in two
different
years, 1995 and 2005.

Overall
, while the percentage of internet
use
for work and study increased in 2005, it both decreased for communication and entertainment. It is
also
noticeable that work remained the major reason for internet usage after 10 years.

In 1995, the proportion of
people
who
use
the internet for work in Japan was the highest among the other purposes at 31% and rose
significantly
by 14% to 45% in 2005.
Similarly
, the figure for
people
who
used
the internet for studying went up from over a quarter to 30% over a decade.

In terms of communication, the percentage declined
slightly
from around a fifth in 1995 to
just
over a tenth in 2005. The figure for entertainment had a more significant reduction from
nearly
a quarter
in


1995 to
end
with almost the same proportion as communication in 2005 with 13%.
3Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes

IELTS academic The pie charts below indicate the primary uses of the internet in Japan in the years 1995 and 2005. v. 1

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