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The pie charts below give information about the composition of household rubbish in the United Kingdom in two different years Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant v.2

The pie charts below give information about the composition of household rubbish in the United Kingdom in two different years
These two pie charts illustrate the data about the composition of household trash for the United Kingdom in 2 different years: 1985 and 2002. There are 8 categories, based on different types of rubbish. On the first pie chart, it shows that 36% of trash is paper in 1985. The second biggest segment is kitchen/organic waste at 28%. The rest parts are: both metals and wood at 8% and glass with plastic make up 14% in total. The smallest part is dust and cinders at 5%. In the second pie chart, dust and cinders are replaced with miscellaneous. There are about 16% of paper followed by 44% of kitchen/organic waste in 2002. 17% of chart belongs to miscellaneous, plastic and wood at 7 and 6% respectively. To give a glance at small parts, it can be seen, that both metals and glass make up 8% in sum. Textiles have the smallest proportion, at just 2%. As an overall trend, while the percentage for the majority types of rubbish falls, the kitchen/organic waste rises.
These two pie
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illustrate the data about the composition of household trash for the United Kingdom in 2
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years: 1985 and 2002. There are 8 categories, based on
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types of rubbish.

On the
first
pie
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, it
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that 36% of trash is paper in 1985. The second biggest segment is kitchen/organic waste at 28%. The rest parts are: both metals and wood at 8% and glass with plastic
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up 14% in total.
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The
smallest part is dust and cinders at 5%.

In the second pie
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, dust and cinders
are replaced
with miscellaneous. There are about 16% of paper followed by 44% of kitchen/organic waste in 2002. 17% of
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belongs to miscellaneous, plastic and wood at 7 and 6%
respectively
. To give a glance at
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small
parts, it can be
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seen
, that both metals and glass
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make
up 8% in sum. Textiles have the smallest proportion, at
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just
2%.

As an
overall
trend, while the percentage for the majority types of rubbish falls, the kitchen/organic waste rises.
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4Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS academic The pie charts below give information about the composition of household rubbish in the United Kingdom in two different years

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6.5
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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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