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The charts below provide the primary reason tourists visited Orange City in two different years. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. v.2

The charts below provide the primary reason tourists visited Orange City in two different years.
The pie-charts represent the main purpose of visiting Orange city by tourists in two different years. In addition, the total number of tourists in both years is also mentioned. Overall, the number of tourists visiting Orange city rose from 1 million to 1. 9 million. Although tourist' s interest in annual events got slightly reduced from 2006 to 2016, it remained as one of the major reason for tourists to visit the city. On the other hand, a dramatic increase has been observed in the visitors interested in the restaurants in 2016, whereas, the percentage of visitors attraction for Museums got reduced significantly. In 2006, 72% of the whole population were likely towards visiting events and museums as their primary interest, where the contribution was 45% and 27% respectively. while theatre visitors were 13% and the restaurant was the least interest as 10%. However, Visitors increase towards the restaurant skyrocketed to 41% in 2016, where events and restaurants together contribute 73% of the total interest. while interest in Museums and Theatre fell moderately, to 11% and 8% respectively.
The pie-charts represent the main purpose of visiting Orange city by
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in both years is
also
mentioned.

Overall
, the number of
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tourists
visiting Orange city rose from 1 million to 1. 9 million. Although
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interest
in annual
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events
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got
slightly
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reduced
from 2006 to 2016, it remained as one of the major reason for
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tourists
to visit the city.
On the other hand
, a dramatic increase has
been observed
in the
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visitors
interested in the
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restaurants
in 2016, whereas, the percentage of
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visitors
attraction for Museums
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got
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reduced
significantly
.

In 2006, 72% of the whole population were likely towards visiting
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events
and museums as their primary
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interest
, where the contribution was 45% and 27%
respectively
.
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while
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theatre
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visitors
were 13% and the
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restaurant
was the least
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interest
as 10%.

However
,
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Visitors
increase towards the
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restaurant
skyrocketed to 41% in 2016, where
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events
and
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restaurants
together contribute 73% of the total
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interest
.
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while
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interest
in Museums and
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Theatre
fell
moderately
, to 11% and 8%
respectively
.
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IELTS academic The charts below provide the primary reason tourists visited Orange City in two different years.

Academic
  American English
4 paragraphs
178 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
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  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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