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The charts below show three types of police reports from the city of Johnstown in 2016, along with Johnstown’s average monthly temperature. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. v.2

The charts below show three types of police reports from the city of Johnstown in 2016, along with Johnstown’s average monthly temperature.
The given graphs show the 2016 police reports and the average monthly temperature as a bar graph and line graph respectively for Johnsown. Also, the bar graph displays police reports in three different categories quaterly against the number of reports. Overall it is a clear and cohesive representation. As it can be seen in the bar graph that the traffic violations are highest at the start of the year but gradually decrease from about 180 to around 140 by the end. Also, there is a sudden bump in theft reports during the peak summer months of July-Sep, however noise complaints remain nearly constant at about 20-25 for the whole year. On the other hand, the average temperature see a gradual rise and decrease distributed evenly over the year hitting a zenith during the months of July-Sep. This is the same time around which thefts are the most. Conclusively, it can be observed that though thefts are more common during the peak summer days in the Johnstown, however traffic violations remain high the whole year around.
The
given
graphs
show
the 2016 police
reports
and the average monthly temperature as a bar
graph
and line
graph
respectively
for
Johnsown
.
Also
, the bar
graph
displays police
reports
in three
different
categories
quaterly
against the number of
reports
.
Overall
it is a
clear
and cohesive representation.

As it can be
seen
in the bar
graph
that the traffic violations are highest at the
start
of the year
but
gradually
decrease from about 180 to around 140 by the
end
.
Also
, there is a sudden bump in theft
reports
during the peak summer months of July-Sep,
however
noise complaints remain
nearly
constant at about 20-25 for the whole year.

On the other hand
, the average temperature
see
a gradual rise and decrease distributed
evenly
over the year hitting a zenith during the months of July-Sep. This is the same time around which thefts are the most.

Conclusively
, it can
be observed
that though thefts are more common during the peak summer days in the Johnstown,
however
traffic violations remain high the whole year around.
6Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
9Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes
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IELTS academic The charts below show three types of police reports from the city of Johnstown in 2016, along with Johnstown’s average monthly temperature.

Academic
  American English
4 paragraphs
175 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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