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The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

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The bar chart illustrates the proportion of males and females from Australia, who did constant physical exercise in 2010. Overall, the trends indicate that women have predominated almost in all age groups, however, the proportions for men were remarkably low. Primarily, the most active lifestyle was led by women (53.3%) who were in the 45 to 54 age group, while for men the figures were noticeably various, 52.3% can be considered between 15 and 24 age group in 2010. For eldest people (65 and over), the figures followed almost the same pattern, 46% and 47% respectively. Additionally, in comparison with the other age groups, males (35 to 44 age) represented a significantly lower percentage, almost 50%, followed by 52.5% of women who tended to do regular exercise. Finally, young people between 25 and 34 ages, illustrated various percentages, men (42.2%) and women (48.8) respectively, where the women obviously were leading performers.
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Overall Band Score: 6.5
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The task is addressed with data comparisons, but some inaccuracies in data description are present.
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The variety of vocabulary is good but could be expanded. Some phrases and word choices are awkward or repetitive.
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The response includes an introduction and details, but overall organization and cohesion could be improved. Linking words are used, but not always effectively leading to some confusing comparisons.
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There is a mix of sentence types, but errors in structure and punctuation reduce effectiveness.

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