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The bar chart below the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010. summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. v.1

The bar chart below the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.
The vertical chart reveals that information of representation proportion of Australian male and female in 2010 nor 15 to 65 age groups without any when gone to the attend class of corporal activity. It is clearly seen that, in 15 to 24 boys were more activity in physical exercise 53% but also 25 to 34 age groups girls have much aware relate to boys. In addition, next age groups women was very attracted do the exercise 34 to 64. Moreover, female had increasing their fitness level day by day nor men was reducing their activity. Moving towards, last 65 group female have nearly fallen up to comparing male group was bit down 48% as well as women have 49%. To sum up, started boys have good proportion regarding to the girls. Then, female 25 to 65 groups have day by day raising or man had reduced activity. Thus, 65 group more than same but 1 percentage different.
The vertical chart reveals that information of representation proportion of Australian male and
female
in 2010 nor 15 to 65 age
groups
without any when gone to
the attend
class
of corporal activity.

It is
clearly
seen
that, in 15 to 24 boys were more activity in physical exercise 53%
but
also
25 to 34 age
groups
girls have much aware relate to boys.
In addition
,
next
age
groups
women was
very
attracted do the exercise 34 to 64.
Moreover
,
female
had increasing their fitness level day by day nor
men
was reducing their activity.

Moving towards, last 65
group
female
have
nearly
fallen up to comparing male
group
was
bit
down 48%
as well
as women have 49%.

To sum up,
started
boys have
good
proportion
regarding to
the girls. Then,
female
25 to 65
groups
have day by day raising or
man
had
reduced
activity.
Thus
, 65
group
more than same
but
1 percentage
different
.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
11Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS academic The bar chart below the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

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  American English
4 paragraphs
157 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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