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The pie chart shows information about water resources, and the bar chart shows the utilization of water in Egypt, Saudi Arabia and Canada. v.2

The pie chart shows information about water resources, and the bar chart shows the utilization of water in Egypt, Saudi Arabia and Canada. v. 2
The given bar charts illustrate the water consumption by the world while the provided bar chart compares water used in countries' fields including domestic, manufacturing and agricultural. It can clearly be seen that fresh water reached the highest point of water using in the world. The figure of water used in Domestic section accounted for the lowest point in all three nations. According to the pie chart, it is noticeable that the percentage of fresh water exceeded that of salty water. To be more specific, in Fresh water, Ground water was utilised 70%, followed by 20% of ice water and 10% from surface water. According to the bar chart, a vast majority of water utilised by agricultural sector in both Egypt and Saudi Arabia. By contrast, Industry water consumption accounted for the highest point of water using in Canada. However, there was a similar pattern of water using among all three countries' domestic section, remaining between 15% and 20%.
The
given
bar
charts
illustrate the
water
consumption by the world while the provided bar
chart
compares
water
used
in
countries&
#039; fields including domestic, manufacturing and agricultural.

It can
clearly
be
seen
that fresh
water
reached the highest point of
water
using in the world. The figure of
water
used
in Domestic section accounted for the lowest point in all three nations.

According to the pie
chart
, it is noticeable that the percentage of fresh
water
exceeded that of salty
water
. To be more specific, in Fresh
water
, Ground
water
was
utilised
70%, followed by 20% of ice
water
and 10% from surface water.

According to the bar
chart
, a vast majority of
water
utilised
by agricultural sector in both Egypt and Saudi Arabia. By contrast, Industry
water
consumption accounted for the highest point of
water
using in Canada.
However
, there was a similar pattern of
water
using among all three
countries&
#039; domestic section, remaining between 15% and 20%.
2Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
18Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes

IELTS academic The pie chart shows information about water resources, and the bar chart shows the utilization of water in Egypt, Saudi Arabia and Canada. v. 2

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4 paragraphs
159 words
6.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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