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The pie chart shows information about water resources, and the bar chart shows the utilization of water in Egypt, Saudi Arabia and Canada. v.2

The pie chart shows information about water resources, and the bar chart shows the utilization of water in Egypt, Saudi Arabia and Canada. v. 2
The given bar charts illustrate the water consumption by the world while the provided bar chart compares water used in countries' fields including domestic, manufacturing and agricultural. It can clearly be seen that fresh water reached the highest point of water using in the world. The figure of water used in Domestic section accounted for the lowest point in all three nations. According to the pie chart, it is noticeable that the percentage of fresh water exceeded that of salty water. To be more specific, in Fresh water, Ground water was utilised 70%, followed by 20% of ice water and 10% from surface water. According to the bar chart, a vast majority of water utilised by agricultural sector in both Egypt and Saudi Arabia. By contrast, Industry water consumption accounted for the highest point of water using in Canada. However, there was a similar pattern of water using among all three countries' domestic section, remaining between 15% and 20%.
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consumption by the world while the provided bar
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using in the world. The figure of
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in Domestic section accounted for the lowest point in all three nations.

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, it is noticeable that the percentage of fresh
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exceeded that of salty
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. To be more specific, in Fresh
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, Ground
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was
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70%, followed by 20% of ice
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and 10% from surface water.

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, a vast majority of
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by agricultural sector in both Egypt and Saudi Arabia. By contrast, Industry
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consumption accounted for the highest point of
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using in Canada.
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IELTS academic The pie chart shows information about water resources, and the bar chart shows the utilization of water in Egypt, Saudi Arabia and Canada. v. 2

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4 paragraphs
159 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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