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The pie chart below shows the main reasons why agricultural land becomes less productive. The table shows how these causes affected three regions of the world during the 1990s. v.7

The pie chart below shows the main reasons why agricultural land becomes less productive. The table shows how these causes affected three regions of the world during the 1990s. v. 7
The presented pie chart outlines main reasons for degradation of farming land worldwide. Meanwhile, the table lists the percentages of land degradation caused in the three regions in the world in the 1990s. In general, deforestation and over-grazing are true as massive factors for agricultural land degradation worldwide. Looking at the details, over-grazing and deforestation amass more than fifty percent land degradation, 35% and 30% respectively. In contrast, over-cultivation and other causes only confirm 35% of land degradation. Meanwhile, regarding the region, in 1990s deforestation was the highest percentage of land degradation in Europe and accounted 9. 8% of total degradation of lands. This figure was higher than over-cultivation and over-grazing in the same region. However, over-grazing was the highest percentage of land degradation factor in Oceania, 11. 3% out of 13% of total land degraded for this reason. Yet, in North America, over-cultivation counted 3. 3% of land degradation and was the highest cause among other factors in the same region, although it was not a high percentage compared to other causes in the other region.
The presented pie chart outlines main reasons for
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degradation
of farming
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land
worldwide. Meanwhile, the table lists the
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percentages
of
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land
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degradation
caused in the three
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regions
in the world in the 1990s.
In general
, deforestation and over-grazing are true as massive factors for agricultural
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land
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degradation
worldwide.

Looking at the
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details
, over-grazing and deforestation amass more than fifty percent
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land
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degradation
, 35% and 30%
respectively
.
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, over-cultivation and
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other
causes
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only
confirm 35% of
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land
degradation.

Meanwhile, regarding the
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region
,
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in 1990s
deforestation was the highest
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percentage
of
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land
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degradation
in Europe and accounted 9. 8% of total
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degradation
of
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lands
. This figure was higher than over-cultivation and over-grazing in the same
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region
.
However
, over-grazing was the highest
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percentage
of
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land
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degradation
factor in Oceania, 11. 3% out of 13% of total
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land
degraded
for this reason
.
Yet
, in North America, over-cultivation counted 3. 3% of
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land
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degradation
and was the highest cause among
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other
factors in the same
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region
, although it was not a high
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percentage
compared to
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other
causes in the
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other
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region
.
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
31Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS academic The pie chart below shows the main reasons why agricultural land becomes less productive. The table shows how these causes affected three regions of the world during the 1990s. v. 7

Academic
  American English
3 paragraphs
177 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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Task Achievement: 6.5
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    Present relevant ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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