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The pie chart below shows the main reasons why agricultural land becomes less productive. The table shows how these causes affected three regions of the world during the 1990s. v.3

The pie chart below shows the main reasons why agricultural land becomes less productive. The table shows how these causes affected three regions of the world during the 1990s. v. 3
The given picture contains two charts, one pie chart and another table chart. As is observed from the pie chart, the main reason for less productivity is overgrazing of animals which constitutes 35%. Another big reason of land degradation is deforestation which holds 30% of the total. Over cultivation also affects the production of land which constitutes 28% while other reasons of land degradation are remaining 7%. As a result, the biggest reason of land degradation is overgrazing of animals in agricultural land. According to the given table, we will analyse what are main causes of less production of land in different regions and how they affect the lands' production. As it can be seen clearly, that Europe is badly degraded by 23%. Europe is degraded by deforestation by 9. 8% while 7. 7% is affected due to over cultivation and finally, 5. 5% degraded by overgrazing. Europe is affected badly by 23% while North America holds 5% and Oceania by 13%. In conclusion, Europe is badly affected by these factors in all of the regions.
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degradation is deforestation which holds 30% of the total. Over cultivation
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degradation is overgrazing of animals in agricultural land.

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IELTS academic The pie chart below shows the main reasons why agricultural land becomes less productive. The table shows how these causes affected three regions of the world during the 1990s. v. 3

Academic
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6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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