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The pie chart below shows the main reasons why agricultural land becomes less productive. The table shows how these causes affected three regions of the world during the 1990s. v.2

The pie chart below shows the main reasons why agricultural land becomes less productive. The table shows how these causes affected three regions of the world during the 1990s. v. 2
The pie chart indicates the factors that negatively affect the productivity of agricultural lands worldwide while the table data illustrates the percentage of land degradation in three main regions due to those factors mentioned. From the pie chart, it can be seen that the major factor that causes the worldwide land degradation is over-grazing. 35% of agricultural lands worldwide become less productive due to a single factor - over-grazing. Deforestation is accounted for 30% degradation of cultivable land while over-cultivation results 28% land degradation. All other minor reasons are categorised as ‘other’ and constituted 7% loss of land fertility. The given table data shows the percentages of agricultural land degradation in three regions during the 1990s, namely - North America, Europe, and Oceania. Oceania comprised many islands in the South Pacific area including New Zealand and Australia. The analysis shows that highest percentage of land degradation, 23%, occurred in Europe in the 1990s. This is followed by Oceania and North America where these percentages were 13% and 5% respectively. The most striking feature was that over-cultivation had zero impact in Oceania as it was mostly affected by over-grazing.
The pie chart indicates the
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lands
worldwide while the table data illustrates the
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land
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degradation
in three main regions due to those
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factors
mentioned.

From the pie chart, it can be
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that the major
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factor
that causes the worldwide
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land
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degradation
is over-grazing. 35% of agricultural
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lands
worldwide become less productive due to a single
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factor
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over-grazing. Deforestation
is accounted
for 30%
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degradation
of cultivable
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land
while over-cultivation results 28%
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land
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degradation
. All other minor reasons are
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as ‘other’ and constituted 7% loss of
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land
fertility.

The
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table data
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the
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of agricultural
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land
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degradation
in three regions during the 1990s,
namely
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North America, Europe, and Oceania. Oceania comprised
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islands in the South Pacific area including New Zealand and Australia. The analysis
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shows
that highest
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land
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degradation
, 23%, occurred in Europe in the 1990s. This
is followed
by Oceania and North America where these
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percentages
were 13% and 5%
respectively
. The most striking feature was that over-cultivation had zero impact in Oceania as it was
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IELTS academic The pie chart below shows the main reasons why agricultural land becomes less productive. The table shows how these causes affected three regions of the world during the 1990s. v. 2

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6.0
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