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The pie chart below shows the main reasons why agricultural land becomes less productive. The table shows how these causes affected three regions of the world during the 1990s. v.4

The pie chart below shows the main reasons why agricultural land becomes less productive. The table shows how these causes affected three regions of the world during the 1990s. v. 4
The given pie chart and table depict the significant causes of less productivity of agricultural land in three parts of the world in the 1990s. As is observed from the pie chart, the main reason for land degradation around the globe is due to over-grazing. It can be clearly seen from the table that Europe had the highest percentage of total land degraded than the other two regions. Over-grazing is the main cause of worldwide land degradation which accounted for 35%. It is followed closely by deforestation which is 5% less than overgrazing by herbivores. The third reason why agricultural land degraded is caused by over-cultivation, accounted for 28%. The non-specific reason which is categorised as ‘other’ stood at 7%. Europe has the highest percentage of land degraded which is 23% in comparison with Oceania which consists of the huge group of islands in the South Pacific including Australia and New Zealand (13%) and North America (5%). In Europe, the most detrimental cause of land degradation is deforestation by human beings which stood at 9. 8%, whereas in Oceania, it is caused mainly by over-grazing which accounted for 11. 3% than deforestation (1. 7%). Over-cultivation did not contribute to the cause of land degradation in Oceania but it was the main reason that led North America to face the land degradation problem, which accounted for 3. 3%.
The
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given
pie chart and table depict the significant
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causes
of less productivity of agricultural
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land
in three parts of the world in the 1990s. As
is observed
from the pie chart, the main
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reason
for
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land
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degradation
around the globe is due to over-grazing. It can be
clearly
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seen
from the table that Europe had the highest percentage of total
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land
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degraded
than the other two regions.

Over-grazing is the main
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cause
of worldwide
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land
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degradation
which
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accounted
for 35%. It
is followed
closely
by deforestation which is 5% less than overgrazing by herbivores. The third
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reason
why agricultural
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land
degraded
is caused
by over-cultivation,
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accounted
for 28%. The non-specific
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reason
which is
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categorised
as ‘other’ stood at 7%.

Europe has the highest percentage of
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land
degraded which is 23%
in comparison
with Oceania which consists of the huge group of islands in the South Pacific including Australia and New Zealand (13%) and North America (5%). In Europe, the most detrimental
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cause
of
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land
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degradation
is deforestation by human beings which stood at 9. 8%, whereas in Oceania, it
is caused
mainly
by over-grazing which
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accounted
for 11. 3% than deforestation (1. 7%). Over-cultivation did not contribute to the
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cause
of
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land
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degradation
in Oceania
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but
it was the main
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reason
that led North America to face the
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land
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degradation
problem, which
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accounted
for 3. 3%.
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IELTS academic The pie chart below shows the main reasons why agricultural land becomes less productive. The table shows how these causes affected three regions of the world during the 1990s. v. 4

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3 paragraphs
227 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 5.5
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