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The pie charts below show units of electricity production by fuel source Australia and France in 1980 and 2000. v.2

The pie charts below show units of electricity production by fuel source Australia and France in 1980 and 2000. v. 2
The given pie charts show data on the electricity production from fuel sources in Australia and in France in 1980 and 2000. As is observed from the pie charts, coal was the main source for electricity production in Australia while France used the Nuclear Power more in recent years to produce their electricity demand. According to the given data, Australia produced 100 units of electricity in 1980 and 170 units in 2000 while the production in France was 90 units and doubled in the year 2000. In Australia, coal was the main source of electricity production and half of the total electricity produced came from coal in 1980. Natural gas and hydropower contributed of producing 20 units of electricity while remaining 10 units was produced from oil. The dependency on coal increased in 2000 for electricity production while oil and natural gases were very minimally used for electricity production. Nuclear power was not used in Australia as a source for producing electricity. On the contrary, In France, natural gas and coal together produced half of the electricity in 1980. The use of nuclear power increased significantly in France in 2000 amounting 126 units in this year compared to the 15 units 20 years back.
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production
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sources
in Australia and in France in 1980 and 2000. As
is observed
from the pie charts, coal was the main
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source
for
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electricity
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production
in Australia while France
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used
the Nuclear Power more in recent years to produce their
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electricity
demand.

According to the
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given
data, Australia
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produced
100
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units
of
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electricity
in 1980 and 170
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units
in 2000 while the
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production
in France was 90
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units
and doubled in the
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year
2000. In Australia, coal was the main
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source
of
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electricity
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production
and half of the total
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electricity
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produced
came from coal in 1980. Natural gas and hydropower contributed of producing 20
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units
of
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electricity
while remaining 10
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units
was
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produced
from oil. The dependency on coal increased in 2000 for
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electricity
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production
while oil and natural gases were
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minimally
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used
for
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electricity
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production
. Nuclear power was not
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used
in Australia as a
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source
for producing electricity.

On the contrary
, In France, natural gas and coal together
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produced
half of the
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electricity
in 1980. The
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use
of nuclear power increased
significantly
in France in 2000 amounting 126
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units
in this
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year
compared to the 15
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units
20 years back.
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IELTS academic The pie charts below show units of electricity production by fuel source Australia and France in 1980 and 2000. v. 2

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