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The pie chart below shows the main reasons why agricultural land becomes less productive. The table shows how these causes affected three regions of the world during the 1990s. v.6

The pie chart below shows the main reasons why agricultural land becomes less productive. The table shows how these causes affected three regions of the world during the 1990s. v. 6
The provided pie charts have four sections, each illustrates the reason of farmland degradation. However, the given table shows the effect of these causes on agricultural lands in three parts of world namely NorthAmerica, Europe and Oceania during the 1990s. As is presented in the pie chart, overgrazing and deforestation are the predominant reasons for losing the productivity of lands which together contribute to 65%. Next, man-made activities such as over-cultivation are responsible for degradation up to 28% which is almost 4 times larger than other factors. According to data given in the table, In 19990, farmland of Europe degraded to the much extent (23 percent land degraded) as compared to other regions, the cause behind this was deforestation. About 10% land lost productivity because of deforestation which is 5 times greater than Oceania. However, deforestation in North America was observed very less only 0. 2percent. Interestingly, In 1990, over cultivation had no effect on islands in the South Pacific. Nevertheless, in other two parts percentage remained between 3 to 8percent. Effect of overgrazing was very less in NorthAmerica. However, it is almost 10times larger in Oceania. In conclusion, in 1990, Europe and Oceania faced the higher problem of land degradation as compared to North America. The main causes behind it were deforestation and overgrazing.
The provided pie charts have four sections, each illustrates the reason of farmland degradation.
However
, the
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the effect of these causes on agricultural
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lands
in three parts of world
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NorthAmerica
, Europe and Oceania during the 1990s.

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is presented
in the pie chart, overgrazing and
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deforestation
are the predominant reasons for losing the productivity of
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lands
which together contribute to 65%.
Next
,
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man
-made activities such as over-cultivation are responsible for degradation up to 28% which is almost 4 times larger than other factors.

According to data
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in the table, In 19990, farmland of Europe degraded to the much extent (23 percent
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land
degraded) as compared to other regions, the cause behind this was
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deforestation
. About 10%
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land
lost productivity
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because
of
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deforestation
which is 5 times greater than Oceania.
However
,
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deforestation
in North America
was observed
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less
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0. 2percent.
Interestingly
, In 1990, over cultivation had no effect on islands in the South Pacific.
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, in other two parts percentage remained between 3 to 8percent. Effect of overgrazing was
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NorthAmerica
.
However
, it is almost 10times larger in Oceania.

In conclusion
, in 1990, Europe and Oceania faced the higher problem of
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land
degradation as compared to North America. The main causes behind it were
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deforestation
and overgrazing.
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IELTS academic The pie chart below shows the main reasons why agricultural land becomes less productive. The table shows how these causes affected three regions of the world during the 1990s. v. 6

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