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The pie chart below show the responses by teachers of foreign language in Britain to a survey concerning why their students are learning a foreign language. The first chart shows the main reason for learning a foreign language. The second chart show how m v.2

The pie chart below show the responses by teachers of foreign language in Britain to a survey concerning why their students are learning a foreign language. The first chart shows the main reason for learning a foreign language. The second chart show how m v. 2
The two pie charts depict the information about the major causes for learning international language and shows teachers reactions why learner' s learn another language. It is vividly seen that, in the first chart 33 per cent of traveling is most popular to learn international language, whereas in the second graph had experienced just three percent. Moreover, learning another language for buying property overseas 19%, whilist in the second graph approximately doubled with 34%. Furthermore, the people learning foreign language for social contacts 7% in the first chart, while in the second chart given twofold growth 15 percent. Moving further, pupils learn international language to personal development in 7% according to teacher given report, whereas in the second chart decrease with 4%. Meanwhile, for the general interest in the both charts given students learn foreign language merely difference just 1%. Overall, the highest percentage of the learn foreign language of travel in the first chart, whereas in the second graph for buying property overseas. Meanwhile, lowest proportion of pupils learning international language for general interest in both years.
The two pie
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international
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language
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teachers reactions why
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learn
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international
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language
, whereas in the second graph had experienced
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just
three percent.
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learning
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language
for buying property overseas 19%,
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in the second graph approximately doubled with 34%.
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people
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learning
foreign
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language
for social contacts 7% in the
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, while in the second
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twofold growth 15 percent.

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international
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language
to personal development in 7% according to teacher
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report, whereas in the second
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decrease with 4%. Meanwhile, for the general interest in the both
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foreign
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language
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, the highest percentage of the
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, whereas in the second graph for buying property overseas. Meanwhile,
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for general interest in both years.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
28Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes

IELTS academic The pie chart below show the responses by teachers of foreign language in Britain to a survey concerning why their students are learning a foreign language. The first chart shows the main reason for learning a foreign language. The second chart show how m v. 2

Academic
  American English
4 paragraphs
178 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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