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The following diagram shows how greenhouse gases trap energy from the Sun. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown in the diagram. v.3

The following diagram shows how greenhouse gases trap energy from the Sun. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown in the diagram. v. 3
The diagram represents the process of greenhouse gases are produced and how these are trapped from the Sun. Overall, the primary causes of carbon dioxide emissions are resulting from mankind actions and the process of making pollution is a complex process. The aids of clouds and the Sun restored the greenhouse emissions and trapped the heat within the ground. The initial greenhouse gases are released from public transportation and these pollution are met with extra carbon dioxide which evacuated from burning power plants by man-made power plants known as burning fossil fuels at factories. The heat will be either remained at outer space or atmosphere as a result of this process. All these accumulated pollution are stored at atmosphere and some of energy received from the sun is reflected off atmosphere. As a result of this, the greenhouse gases are trapped on earth and tree remaining are absorbing carbon dioxides.
The diagram represents the process of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
greenhouse
gases
are produced
and how these
are trapped
from the Sun.

Overall
, the primary causes of carbon dioxide emissions are resulting from mankind actions and the process of making pollution is a complex process. The aids of clouds and the Sun restored the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
greenhouse
emissions and trapped the heat within the ground.

The initial
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
greenhouse
gases
are released
from public transportation and
Did you mean "this pollution" or "these pollutions"?
these pollution
are met
with extra carbon dioxide which evacuated from burning power plants by
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
man
-made power plants known as burning fossil fuels at factories.
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
The
heat will be either remained at outer space or atmosphere
as a result
of this process.

All these accumulated pollution
are stored
at atmosphere and
Consider using "some energy" or "some of the energy".
some of energy
received from the sun
is reflected
off atmosphere.
As a result
of this, the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
greenhouse
gases
are trapped
on earth and tree remaining are absorbing carbon dioxides.
3Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
4Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS academic The following diagram shows how greenhouse gases trap energy from the Sun. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown in the diagram. v. 3

Academic
  American English
4 paragraphs
150 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Lexical Resource: 6.5
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
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  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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