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The table shows the sales figures of Fairtrade-labelled coffee and banana in five countries, namely, U. K, Switzerland, Denmark, Belgium and Sweden in the years 1999 and 2004. v.2

The table shows the sales figures of Fairtrade-labelled coffee and banana in five countries, namely, U. K, Switzerland, Denmark, Belgium and Sweden in the years 1999 and 2004. v. 2
IELTS Sample Answer 2 The table shows the sales figures of Fairtrade-labelled goods in five European countries in millions of euros in 1999 and 2004. The figures are for coffee and bananas. First of all, although coffee sales increased over the period in all five countries, there was a large difference in how they increased. In Switzerland and in Belgium, fairtrade coffee sales more or less doubled to 6 and 1. 7 million respectively, while in Denmark and Sweden sales increased very little, rising only 0. 2 million in both countries. In contrast, Britain’s consumption of coffee rocketed from 1. 5 to 20 million, which catapulted it from the third largest consumer in 1999, to first five years later. It was a slightly different story with Bananas. The first key difference is that generally fairtrade Banana sales increased dramatically. For example, in the UK they tripled to over 45 million (from 15), in Switzerland they rose by over 500% to 5. 5, and in Denmark they rose even faster, growing from 0. 6 to 4 million, which was an increase of more than 600%. While these countries experienced dramatic growth, in Belgium and Sweden, sales actually halved to 1 and 0. 9 million respectively. As a result, these countries fell to fourth and fifth. In conclusion, coffee sales increased in more countries than banana sales. It also shows that the sales of both rose much faster in the UK than any other countries, though Switzerland also did well.
IELTS Sample Answer 2

The table
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the
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figures of
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Fairtrade-labelled
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goods
in five European
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countries
in
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millions
of euros in 1999 and 2004. The figures are for
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coffee
and bananas.

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First of all
, although
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coffee
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sales
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increased
over the period in all five
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countries
, there was a large difference in how they
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increased
. In Switzerland and in Belgium,
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fairtrade
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coffee
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sales
more or less doubled to 6 and 1. 7
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million
respectively
, while in Denmark and Sweden
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sales
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increased
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very
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, rising
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only
0. 2
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million
in both
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countries
.
In contrast
, Britain’s consumption of
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coffee
rocketed from 1. 5 to 20
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million
, which catapulted it from the third largest consumer in 1999, to
first
five years later.

It was a
slightly
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story with Bananas. The
first
key difference is that
generally
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fairtrade
Banana
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sales
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increased
dramatically
.
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, in the UK they tripled to over 45
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million
(from 15), in Switzerland they rose by over 500% to 5. 5, and in Denmark they rose even faster, growing from 0. 6 to 4
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million
, which was an increase of more than 600%. While these
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countries
experienced dramatic growth, in Belgium and Sweden,
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sales
actually halved to 1 and 0. 9
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million
respectively
.
As a result
, these
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countries
fell to fourth and fifth.

In conclusion
,
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coffee
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sales
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increased
in more
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countries
than banana
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sales
. It
also
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shows
that the
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sales
of both rose much faster in the UK than any other
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countries
, though Switzerland
also
did well.
10Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
33Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes
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IELTS academic The table shows the sales figures of Fairtrade-labelled coffee and banana in five countries, namely, U. K, Switzerland, Denmark, Belgium and Sweden in the years 1999 and 2004. v. 2

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