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The pie charts below show responses by teachers of foreign languages in Britain to a survey concerning why their students are learning a foreign language. The first chart shows the main reason for learning a foreign language. The second chart shows how many teachers felt that there has been a recent change in the reason. v.2

The pie charts below show responses by teachers of foreign languages in Britain to a survey concerning why their students are learning a foreign language. The first chart shows the main reason for learning a foreign language. The second chart shows how many teachers felt that there has been a recent change in the reason. v. 2
The first pie chart shows different reasons why students learn a second language while the second chart illustrates how they account for recent changes. Data is based on a survey by some British teachers of foreign languages. Overall, travel seems to be the primary reason for learning a second language among British students. At the same time, the majority of teachers think that the recent increase in students' learning of a foreign language habit these days is mainly influenced by the aim of owning overseas properties or professional reason. To begin with, 1 out of every 3 teachers of foreign languages in Britain believes that students learn a foreign language for travelling. But conversely, regarding the effect it has to recent changes, it represents the lowest proportion, with only 3% of all teachers think so. Besides, the purpose of work or business accounts for learning according to 26% of teachers, and 19% think that they increased recently. On the other hand, just below one-fifth of all teachers believe that students' main reason for learning a new language to buy properties. However, the figure becomes as high as one-third when it comes to its effect. Similarities can be seen for general interest, personal development and having a foreign partner, as their figures are around 5%. Additionally, 15% of all teachers attribute recent changes to having social contacts. And finally, an equal proportion of teachers believe there have been no changes.
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10Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
31Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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A different language is a different vision of life.
Federico Fellini

IELTS academic The pie charts below show responses by teachers of foreign languages in Britain to a survey concerning why their students are learning a foreign language. The first chart shows the main reason for learning a foreign language. The second chart shows how many teachers felt that there has been a recent change in the reason. v. 2

Academic
  American English
4 paragraphs
239 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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