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The pie charts below show responses by teachers of foreign languages in Britain to a survey concerning why their students are learning a foreign language. The first chart shows the main reason for learning a foreign language. The second chart shows how many teachers felt that there has been a recent change in the reason. v.4

The pie charts below show responses by teachers of foreign languages in Britain to a survey concerning why their students are learning a foreign language. The first chart shows the main reason for learning a foreign language. The second chart shows how many teachers felt that there has been a recent change in the reason. v. 4
The given pie charts elucidate the opinions of some British foreign language teachers about the primary causes for students to learn a second language. Overall, career, travel and purchasing overseas property are three main reasons which were reported earlier for people to develop a second language skill and recent changes show that more people started learning the language due to other factors like social contact. According to the first diagram, one-third of the teachers in Britain who teach a foreign language believe that people learn a second language so that they can travel. According to them, career prospect is the second most important reason that drives just over one-fourth of the language learners. Interestingly, 19% of students learned the language to be able to buy property while personal development and social contact each as a reason were reported by 7% of teachers. The least percentage of tutors believe that people learn a language to have a foreign partner. The second pie chart, however, shows that there had been some changes and property purchase in a foreign country was reported as the main reason for learning a language. Career, according to this diagram, was the second most favoured reason while social contact attracted. Only 3% of teachers at that survey believed that people learn a second language to travel. All other reasons contributed to just above 10% of student's learning a foreign language.
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teachers
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.
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language
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skill
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changes
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language
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teachers
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language
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language
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that they can travel. According to them, career prospect is the second most
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language
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property while personal development and social contact each as a
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reason
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learn
a
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reason
for learning a
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language
. Career, according to this diagram, was the second most
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while social contact attracted.
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teachers
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3Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
36Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes

IELTS academic The pie charts below show responses by teachers of foreign languages in Britain to a survey concerning why their students are learning a foreign language. The first chart shows the main reason for learning a foreign language. The second chart shows how many teachers felt that there has been a recent change in the reason. v. 4

Academic
  American English
3 paragraphs
232 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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