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The pie chart below show the online sales for retail sectors in New Zealand in 2003 and 2013 Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant v.2

The pie chart below show the online sales for retail sectors in New Zealand in 2003 and 2013
The pie charts illustrate the shares of online sales in term of different retail sectors in New Zealand between two years 2003 and 2013. The general view is that books sector was always surpassed by travel and film/music in the amount of online shopping sales. To specify, in 2003, the biggest amount was occupied by travel with 36%, followed by clothes and film/music with 24% and 21% respectively. The opposite was witnessed in books sector, with the percentage was only 19%. On the contrary, in 2013, by the increase of the share from 21% to 33%, film/music had accounted for the largest amount in sales. While the rates of travel and clothes had declined to 29% and 16% respectively, the figure of books climbed from 19% to 22%, which was greater than clothes. Interestingly, only in the sector of film/music did we see the biggest change in the percentage of share with 12% increase. In conclusion, there was a quick movement of the market shares in the online sales for retail sectors in New Zealand.
The pie charts illustrate the
shares
of online sales in term of
different
retail
sectors
in New Zealand between two years 2003 and 2013. The general view is that books
sector
was always surpassed by travel and film/music in the amount of online shopping sales.

To specify, in 2003, the biggest amount
was occupied
by travel with 36%, followed by clothes and film/music with 24% and 21%
respectively
. The opposite
was witnessed
in books
sector
, with the percentage was
only
19%.

On the contrary
, in 2013, by the increase of the
share
from 21% to 33%, film/music had accounted for the largest amount in sales. While the rates of travel and clothes had declined to 29% and 16%
respectively
, the figure of books climbed from 19% to 22%, which was greater than clothes.
Interestingly
,
only
in the
sector
of film/music did we
see
the biggest
change
in the percentage of
share
with 12% increase.

In conclusion
, there was a quick movement of the market
shares
in the online sales for retail
sectors
in New Zealand.
2Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
9Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Mistakes

IELTS academic The pie chart below show the online sales for retail sectors in New Zealand in 2003 and 2013

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