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The pictures illustrate the changes in Shipsmouth between 1995 and 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant v.2

The pictures illustrate the changes in Shipsmouth between 1995 and 2010.
The two pictures highlight the main changes in Shipsmouth between the year 1995 and 2010. Overall, It can be seen that in 1995, Shipsmouth was a green city with a lot of trees. But in 2010, it had become urbanised with so many new high-rise buildings, transport facilities, shopping centre, sport facilities. The striking change is that the city was pedestrianised in 2010, which meant that there were some ways for only walking-people. A factory, which is a concern of pollution because of its smoke was converted and replaced by a modern shopping centre. Another interesting development is that there was many trees in 1995 in the western north and the eastern south of the city, which was cut down and by 2010, apartment blocks and an airport had been constructed in their places. If we look at houses in 1995, they were redeveloped to become skyscrapers. Likewise, a church was knocked down to make way for a pub. And it is interesting to note that the construction of a new station and a football stadium in empty lands of the city.
The two pictures highlight the main
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changes
in
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Shipsmouth
between the year 1995 and 2010.

Overall
, It can be
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seen
that in 1995,
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Shipsmouth
was a green city with
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a lot of
trees.
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But
in 2010, it had become
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urbanised
with
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so
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many
new high-rise buildings, transport facilities, shopping
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centre
, sport facilities.

The striking
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change
is that the city was
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pedestrianised
in 2010, which meant that there were
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some
ways for
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only
walking-
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people
. A factory, which is a concern of pollution
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because
of its smoke
was converted
and replaced by a modern shopping
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centre
. Another interesting development is that there was
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many
trees in 1995 in the western north and the eastern south of the city, which was
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cut
down and by 2010, apartment blocks and an airport had
been constructed
in their places.

If we look at
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houses
in 1995, they
were redeveloped
to become skyscrapers.
Likewise
, a church
was knocked
down to
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make
way for a pub. And it is interesting to note that the construction of a new station and a football stadium in empty lands of the city.
2Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes
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IELTS academic The pictures illustrate the changes in Shipsmouth between 1995 and 2010.

Academic
  American English
4 paragraphs
182 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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