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The paragraph below shows the consumption of fish and some different kinds of meat in a European country between 1979 and 2004. v.2

The paragraph below shows the consumption of fish and some different kinds of meat in a European country between 1979 and 2004. v. 2
The provided graph compares the consume of fish and three other types of meat such as: beef, lamb and chicken in a country that is located in Europe from 1979 to 2004. At a glance fish consumption remains the same during the period. On the other hand, beef and lamb decreased sharply, although beef graph increased at first. The only increase in consuming the meat belongs to chicken, which rose rapidly between 1979 and 2004. By comparing the beef and the lamb, it shows that beef reached a peak in 80' s which the consumption is around 25 grams per person per week, but after a while it dropped slightly, although the consumption increased minimally after 1989 by consuming 100 grams per person weekly. The lamb consumption decreased sharply by 1979 and the graph shows the alter in consuming of the lamb by passing the time. It hit to the highest point in 1979 by 150 grams per person and reached to the lowest point around 2000 by more than 50 grams per person. The fish graph depicts that consuming of the fish didn' t face with significant alter, and mostly were stable from 1979 to 2004. On the other hand chicken consumption increased sharply and reached on a peak around 2000 which show 250 gram per person per week. Above all, consumers tendency for chicken increased by the time and they decided to consume less beef and lamb during the period. On the other hand, fish consumption didn' t have many changes by passing the time.
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the consume
of fish and three
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other
types of meat such as:
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beef
,
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lamb
and chicken in a country that
is located
in Europe from 1979 to 2004. At a glance fish
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consumption
remains the same during the period. On the
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other
hand,
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beef
and
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lamb
decreased
sharply
, although
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beef
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graph
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increased
at
first
. The
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only
increase in consuming the meat belongs to chicken, which rose
rapidly
between 1979 and 2004. By comparing the
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beef
and the
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lamb
, it
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shows
that
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beef
reached a peak in 80' s which the
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consumption
is around 25
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grams
per
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person
per week,
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but
after a while it dropped
slightly
, although the
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consumption
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increased
minimally
after 1989 by consuming 100
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grams
per
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person
weekly. The
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lamb
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consumption
decreased
sharply
by 1979 and the
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graph
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shows
the alter in consuming of the
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lamb
by passing the time. It hit to the highest point in 1979 by 150
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grams
per
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person
and reached to the lowest point around 2000 by more than 50
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grams
per
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person
. The fish
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graph
depicts that consuming of the fish
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didn&
#039; t face with significant alter, and
mostly
were stable from 1979 to 2004. On the
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other
hand chicken
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consumption
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increased
sharply
and reached on a peak around 2000 which
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show
250
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gram
per
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person
per week.
Above all
, consumers tendency for chicken
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increased
by the
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time and
they decided to consume less
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beef
and
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lamb
during the period. On the
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hand, fish
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consumption
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changes
by passing the time.
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40Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Mistakes

IELTS academic The paragraph below shows the consumption of fish and some different kinds of meat in a European country between 1979 and 2004. v. 2

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257 words
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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