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IELTS writing task 1The graph below shows the consumption of fish and some different kinds of meat in a European country between 1979 and 2004. v.2

IELTS writing task 1The graph below shows the consumption of fish and some different kinds of meat in a European country between 1979 and 2004. v. 2
This line graph gives the amount of fish, meat, lamb and beef that the people of a European country consumed from 1979 to 2004. Overall, the fish and meat consumption varied continually between 1979 and 2004. The fish consumption always was the lowest while the rest of the catalogues one was very complicated. The lamb consumption didn' t vary like the amount of beef was eaten. The beef consumption always was higher than that of lamb. In 1979, the lamb started around 150 and decreased gradually to 50 grams in 2004. In terms of the beef consumption, there was a dip in 1982 from above 200 to below 200 grams, although after that having a slight growth, the decline still took place continually and the number in 2004 was approximately 150 grams per person per week. The consumption of chicken trended upwards, with some minor fluctuations. Although it started at a lower level than a lamb, it reached the highest was 250 grams. By contrast, the fish one always stayed at the lowest at around 50 grams, The good side of fish consumption had that was very consistent, there wasn' t any variation in the whole time referred.
This line graph gives the amount of fish, meat,
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lamb
and
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beef
that the
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people
of a European country consumed from 1979 to 2004.

Overall
, the fish and meat
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consumption
varied
continually
between 1979 and 2004. The fish
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consumption
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always was
the lowest while the rest of the
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catalogues
one was
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very
complicated.

The
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lamb
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consumption
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didn&
#039; t vary like the amount of
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beef
was eaten
.
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The
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beef
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consumption
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always was
higher than that of
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lamb
. In 1979, the
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lamb
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started
around 150 and decreased
gradually
to 50
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grams
in 2004. In terms of the
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beef
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consumption
, there was a dip in 1982 from above 200 to below 200
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grams
, although after that having a slight growth, the decline
still
took place
continually
and the number in 2004 was approximately 150
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grams
per person per week.

The
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consumption
of chicken trended upwards, with
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some
minor fluctuations. Although it
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started
at a lower level than a
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lamb
, it reached the highest was 250
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grams
. By contrast, the fish one always stayed at the lowest at around 50
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grams
, The
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good
side of fish
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consumption
had that was
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very
consistent, there
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wasn&
#039; t any variation in the whole time referred.
2Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
21Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
6Mistakes

IELTS academic IELTS writing task 1The graph below shows the consumption of fish and some different kinds of meat in a European country between 1979 and 2004. v. 2

Academic
  American English
4 paragraphs
198 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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