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The graphe below shows the consumption of fish and some different kinds of meat in a European country between 1979 and 2004. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. v.2

The graphe below shows the consumption of fish and some different kinds of meat in a European country between 1979 and 2004.
The line graph demonstrates the amount of fish and some various types of meat which had consumed in some European country during 40 years. From a simple recognition to the provided information, it is apparent chicken was the most kind of meat that a person used per week. While, minimum portion a person used to use belong to fish. In 1979, beef was the most popular kind of meat because it used to be eaten 220 grams per person in a week, although, chicken and lamp were eaten is a similar portion by approximately 150 grams by a person in the same time. Also, fish were just a negligible proportion of meals in a week by 50 grams in a week. it is considerable that in 2004, both beef and lamb amounts in people’s diet declined dramatically, beef usage fell to 110 grams in a week and lamb decreased to mere 60 grams per person in one week. Besides that, it is noticeable that chicken proportion rose particularly from 1989 to 2004.
The line graph demonstrates the amount of fish and
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various types of meat which had consumed in
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European country during 40 years.

From a simple recognition to the provided information, it is apparent chicken was
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the most kind
of meat that a
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person
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used
per
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week
.
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While
, minimum portion a
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person
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used
to
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use
belong to fish.

In 1979, beef was the most popular kind of meat
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because
it
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used
to
be eaten
220
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grams
per
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person
in a
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week
, although, chicken and lamp
were eaten
is a similar portion by approximately 150
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grams
by a
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person
in the same time.
Also
, fish were
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just
a negligible proportion of meals in a
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week
by 50
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grams
in a week.

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it
is considerable that in 2004, both beef and lamb amounts in
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people
’s diet declined
dramatically
, beef usage fell to 110
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grams
in a
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week
and lamb decreased to mere 60
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grams
per
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person
in one
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week
.
Besides
that, it is noticeable that chicken proportion rose
particularly
from 1989 to 2004.
3Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
15Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes
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IELTS academic The graphe below shows the consumption of fish and some different kinds of meat in a European country between 1979 and 2004.

Academic
  American English
4 paragraphs
172 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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