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The graph below shows the consumption of fish and some different kinds of meat in a European country between 1979 and 2004. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. v.2

The graph below shows the consumption of fish and some different kinds of meat in a European country between 1979 and 2004.
The given line graph compares the amount of fish and other kind of meat consumed by a person every week in a European country from 1979 to 2004. It is noticeable that the consumption of chicken meat rose dramatically for 25 years. On the other hand, the amount of beef that consumed by a people every week decreased significantly on this periods. Looking at more details, beef is the most favored meat to consume in 1979, with above 200 grams per person per week. It reached its peak in between 1979 and 1984 by almost 250 grams of meat. Then, it gradually decreased and touched just around 120 grams in 2004. However, the chicken meat is the third preference of the people' s choice who want to consume meat in 1979. It below the beef and lamb, respectively, but above the fish with almost 150 grams of chicken consumption per week. It rose gradually and touch about 250 grams in 2004. The lamb, on the other hand, decreased to slightly above 50 grams in 2004. Meanwhile, the consumption of meat is steady around 50 grams per week per person for two and a half decades.
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line graph compares the amount of fish and other kind of
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meat
consumed by a person every
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week
in a European country from 1979 to 2004.

It is noticeable that the consumption of chicken
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meat
rose
dramatically
for 25 years.
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, the amount of beef that consumed by a
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people
every
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week
decreased
significantly
on
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this
periods.

Looking at more
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details
, beef is the most favored
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meat
to consume in 1979, with above 200
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grams
per person per
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week
. It reached its peak in between 1979 and 1984 by almost 250
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grams
of
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meat
. Then, it
gradually
decreased and touched
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around 120
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grams
in 2004.

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, the chicken
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meat
is the third preference of the
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meat
in 1979. It below the beef and lamb,
respectively
,
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above the fish with almost 150
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grams
of chicken consumption per
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week
. It rose
gradually
and touch about 250
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grams
in 2004. The lamb,
on the other hand
, decreased to
slightly
above 50
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grams
in 2004. Meanwhile, the consumption of
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meat
is steady around 50
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grams
per
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week
per person for two and a half decades.
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19Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS academic The graph below shows the consumption of fish and some different kinds of meat in a European country between 1979 and 2004.

Academic
  American English
4 paragraphs
195 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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