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Ielts 7 test 2 writing task1. The graph below shows consumption of fish and different kinds of meat in a European country between 1979 and 2004. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. v.2

Ielts 7 test 2 writing task1. The graph below shows consumption of fish and different kinds of meat in a European country between 1979 and 2004.
The line graph given below illustrates the intake of fish and some kinds of meat in a country of Europe between 1979 and 2004. People consumed beef more than other type of meats described. The consumption of Fish was the least among all items in early 1980' s. Overall, the consumption of different types of meat has decreased from 1979 to 2004, except Chicken consumption which rose gradually during the years. The consumption of fish, however, remained relatively stable during the 25 years. The amount of Chicken consumed by a person per week has risen steadily. It was just less than 150 grams/ week in 1979. Over time it rose to around 250 grams/week in 2004. Beef and lamb both were consumed in large quantities of 150 grams/week and above in early 1980' s. Their consumption has decreased to around 150 grams/week or less in 2004. The consumption of fish however remained most stable or to be precise, it has decreased around grams/week from 60 grams to 50 grams/week for an individual during the past quarter of century.
The line graph
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below illustrates the intake of fish and
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some
kinds of meat in a country of Europe between 1979 and 2004.

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People
consumed beef more than other type of meats
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described
. The
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consumption
of Fish was the least among all items in early 1980' s.
Overall
, the
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consumption
of
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different
types of meat has decreased from 1979 to 2004, except Chicken
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consumption
which rose
gradually
during the years. The
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consumption
of fish,
however
, remained
relatively
stable during the 25 years.

The amount of Chicken consumed by a person per week has risen
steadily
. It was
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just
less than 150 grams/ week in 1979. Over
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time it
rose to around 250
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grams/week
in 2004.

Beef and lamb both
were consumed
in large quantities of 150
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grams/week
and above in early 1980' s. Their
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consumption
has decreased to around 150
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grams/week
or less in 2004.

The
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consumption
of fish
however
remained most stable or to be precise, it has decreased around
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grams/week
from 60 grams to 50
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grams/week
for an individual during the past quarter of century.
3Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
11Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes

IELTS academic Ielts 7 test 2 writing task1. The graph below shows consumption of fish and different kinds of meat in a European country between 1979 and 2004.

Academic
  American English
5 paragraphs
178 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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