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The chart bellow shows the total number of minutes (in billions) of telephone calls in the UK, divided into three categories, from 1995-2002Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant. v.2

The chart bellow shows the total number of minutes (in billions) of telephone calls in the UK, divided into three categories, from 1995-2002
The graph depicts the average of minutes (by billions) of telephone conversation in the UK, accounted from three types, i. e. local-fixed line, national and international line, as well as mobile phones between 1995 and 2002. Overall, both national-international line services and mobile phones experienced a graduate increase in the given period. By contrast, local-fixed line, although possessed bigger portion of usage in 1999 onward, somehow begin to decrease in the end of the given sequence. Firstly, the number of telephone calls trough national and international services gradually escalated from approximately 38 billion minute calls 1995 to reach just beyond 60 billion minutes annually in the end of 2002. Similarly, the mobile phone services, which the tiniest portions in the initial period, showed a considerable growth over the years, i. e. from nearly 2 billion minute calls in 95 to about 45 billion minute phone-conversations in 2002. On the other hand, local-line services that stood at just after 70 billion minutes in 1995, convincingly rose to 90 billion in 1998 onward and remained stable to 1999, before it dropped gradually to reach just above 70 billion minute calls in 2002 respectively.
The graph depicts the average of minutes (by
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billions)
of telephone conversation in the UK, accounted from three types,
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i. e.
local-
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fixed
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line
, national and international
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line
,
as well
as mobile phones between 1995 and 2002.

Overall
, both national-international
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line
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services
and mobile phones experienced a graduate increase in the
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given
period. By contrast, local-
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fixed
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line
, although possessed bigger portion of usage in 1999 onward, somehow
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begin
to decrease in the
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end
of the
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given
sequence.

Firstly
, the number of telephone
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calls
trough national and international
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services
gradually
escalated from approximately 38
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billion
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minute
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calls
1995 to reach
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just
beyond 60
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billion
minutes
annually
in the
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end
of 2002.
Similarly
, the mobile phone
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services
, which the tiniest portions in the initial period,
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showed
a considerable growth over the years,
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i. e.
from
nearly
2
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billion
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minute
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calls
in 95 to about 45
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billion
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minute
phone-conversations in 2002.
On the other hand
, local-line
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services
that stood at
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just
after 70
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billion
minutes in 1995,
convincingly
rose to 90
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billion
in 1998 onward and remained stable to 1999,
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before
it dropped
gradually
to reach
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just
above 70
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billion
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minute
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calls
in 2002
respectively
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24Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS academic The chart bellow shows the total number of minutes (in billions) of telephone calls in the UK, divided into three categories, from 1995-2002

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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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