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People who make decisions based on emotion and justify those decisions with logic afterwards are poor decision makers. v.2

People who make decisions based on emotion and justify those decisions with logic afterwards are poor decision makers. v. 2
Decision making is a very crucial aspect of human development. The path that one lives is sculpted by their decisions and consequences. In the following paragraphs I will discuss the addressed topic with my point of view, justifications and examples. First of all, I want to make clear that emotion and logic are in two separated areas and differ in nature. Logic is purely reasonable and scientific and emotion as much to do with sentiments and feelings that sometimes are not logic. Making important decisions only based on emotion can be very dangerous since it lacks logic and data to back it up. For example, investing in something or someone only based on the first impressions, style or the feelings that you have for that particular person. On the contrary, since we are all human beings and not robots, we are guided not only by logic but also by emotions. Like when we chose our partner, the altruism given to our loved ones and charity acts. All these examples contain important decisions that are driven by emotion and sometimes represent a paradigm in which people debate. Nevertheless, emotion can sometimes be used to decide when logic is lacking. Many times people say that they have a gut feeling that something is not going to work fine and most of the times they are right. The human brain is designed to use the conscious and subconscious mind and therefore only focusing in the logic part may be wrong and very limited. In summary, people who make decisions based on emotion and justify those decisions with logic afterwards can be poor decision makers since they haven´t gotten data or quantifiable information to back it up but since we are only humans and design to have a subconscious brain they may be not so poor decision makers afterall.
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development. The path that one
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lives
is sculpted
by their
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decisions
and consequences. In the following paragraphs I will discuss the addressed topic with my point of view, justifications and examples.

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, I want to
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make
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that
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emotion
and
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logic
are in two separated areas and differ in nature.
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is
purely
reasonable and scientific and
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as much to do with sentiments and feelings that
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sometimes
are not logic.

Making
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decisions
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can be
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since it lacks
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and data to back it up.
For example
, investing in something or someone
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only
based on the
first
impressions, style or the feelings that you have for that particular person.

On the contrary
, since we are all
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human
beings and not robots, we
are guided
not
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only
by
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logic
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also
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emotions
. Like when we chose our partner, the altruism
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given
to our
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loved
ones and charity acts. All these examples contain
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important
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decisions
that
are driven
by
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and
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represent a paradigm in which
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debate.
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,
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can
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sometimes
be
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used
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logic
is lacking.
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times
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people
say that they have a gut feeling that something is not going to work fine and
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most of the times
they are right. The
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human
brain
is designed
to
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use
the conscious and subconscious mind and
therefore
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focusing in the
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logic
part may be
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and
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limited.

In summary,
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and justify those
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decisions
with
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afterwards can be poor
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decision
makers since they
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gotten data or quantifiable information to back it up
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since we are
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humans
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poor
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decision
makers
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31Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS academic People who make decisions based on emotion and justify those decisions with logic afterwards are poor decision makers. v. 2

Academic
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305 words
5.5
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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