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The maps below show the changes that have taken place at the seaside resort of Templeton between 1990 and 2005. v.2

The maps below show the changes that have taken place at the seaside resort of Templeton between 1990 and 2005. v. 2
The maps represent the changes made in the seaside resort called Templeton from 1990 to 2005. Overall, majority areas were placed for resident housings in 1990 and which changed to the commercial areas by 2005. Most of housings have substituted by buildings and factories. A school and hospital located in North-east of Templeton have remained unchanged. In 1990, majority parts of Templeton were used for housing purposes. In fact, all the areas in the West side of Templeton were residential areas and in the East, there were fewer houses. By 2005, most of Templeton became crowded with buildings. The housings that located in West had replaced with tall buildings and a large supermarket had built I the middle of those buildings. Meanwhile, a factory, ferry and airport had newly constructed. A factory and ferry were located in South-West and South-East of Templeton respectively, whereas airport was sited on the North-West of sites, next to the schools. In addition, new railway roads that connect between west and east of areas had also newly built.
The maps represent the
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changes
made in the seaside resort called Templeton from 1990 to 2005.

Overall
, majority
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areas
were placed
for resident housings in 1990 and which
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changed
to the commercial
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areas
by 2005.
After 'Most of', you should use 'the' ("Most of the housings") or simply say "Most housings".
Most of housings
have substituted by
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buildings
and factories. A school and hospital located in North-east of Templeton have remained unchanged.

In 1990, majority parts of Templeton were
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used
for housing purposes. In fact, all the
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areas
in the West side of Templeton were residential
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areas
and in the East, there were fewer
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houses
.

By 2005, most of Templeton became crowded with
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buildings
. The housings that located in West had replaced with tall
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buildings
and a large supermarket had built I the middle of those
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buildings
. Meanwhile, a factory, ferry and airport had
newly
constructed. A factory and ferry
were located
in South-West and South-East of Templeton
respectively
, whereas airport
was sited
on the North-West of sites,
next
to the schools.
In addition
, new railway roads that connect between west and east of
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areas
had
also
newly
built.
4Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
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IELTS academic The maps below show the changes that have taken place at the seaside resort of Templeton between 1990 and 2005. v. 2

Academic
  American English
4 paragraphs
173 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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