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The chart below shows the proportions of adults in Canada who own one car, two cars, more than two cars, or who do not own a car. v.2

The chart below shows the proportions of adults in Canada who own one car, two cars, more than two cars, or who do not own a car. v. 2
The given pie chart illustrates the percentages of Canadian people who do not own a car or own at least one car. It is noticeable that there are four groups of car owners namely no-car, one-car, two-car, and over-two-car owners. Also, the proportion of one-car owners is the highest while the least is of those who have more than two cars. Look at the chart for more detail, there are just over half of the adults have one automobile in Canada shown in the blue segment in the chart that is the highest percentage in the four groups. The second highest figure shown in green is those who own two cars, accounting for about 25 percent. In addition, the figure for Canadian adults owning no car is slightly lower than that of two-car owners with about a fifth. The group having the smallest proportion of all groups is more-than-two-car owners. The figure for this group is just around 5 percent.
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pie chart illustrates the percentages of Canadian
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people
who do not
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own
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car
or
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own
at least one car.

It is noticeable that there are four
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groups
of
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car
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owners
namely
no-car, one-car, two-car, and over-two-car
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owners
.
Also
, the proportion of one-car
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owners
is the highest while the least is of those who have more than two cars.

Look at the chart for more detail, there are
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over half of the adults have one automobile in Canada shown in the blue segment in the chart
that is
the highest percentage in the four
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groups
. The second highest figure shown in green is those who
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own
two
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cars
, accounting for about 25 percent.

In addition
, the figure for Canadian adults owning no
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car
is
slightly
lower than that of two-car
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owners
with about a fifth. The
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group
having the smallest proportion of all
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groups
is more-than-two-car
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owners
. The figure for this
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group
is
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around 5 percent.
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IELTS academic The chart below shows the proportions of adults in Canada who own one car, two cars, more than two cars, or who do not own a car. v. 2

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4 paragraphs
160 words
6.5
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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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