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he diagrams below show the design for a wave-energy machine and its location. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. v.2

he diagrams below show the design for a wave-energy machine and its location.
The provided diagrams represents the design for a wave-energy machine and the location options where it should be placed. The machine is divided into two chambers. The upper chamber consists of turbine and electricity generator and the bottom chamber takes in the water from waves. The wave-energy machine is somewhat submerged in the sea to take in the water that comes from waves. This causes the increase in the water level inside the machine which in effect pushes the remaining air upwards. This air flow causes the blades of the turbines to rotate. The placement of blades as well as inlets and outlets of air is done in such a way that all the air flow helps turbine to rotate faster. The inlet of air entring the machine from top is on the left side of the machine and the air traveled through the machine from bottom exits from the right side of the machine. The turbine is connected to the electricity generator that produces electricity from the rotation of turbine. The placement of this wave-energy machine can be done is different ways which is explained in the second diagram. The diagram says that placing the wave-energy machine close to shore is cheaper compared to far in the ocean because of the installation costs while the waves near shore are smaller compared to far in the ocean. One important point shown in the diagram is that small waves causes low electricity out than large waves. This concludes that the decision of selecting the location for installation of wave-energy machine is based on a trade-off between installation costs and energy outputs.
The provided diagrams
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the design for a wave-energy
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machine
and the location options where it should
be placed
.

The
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machine
is divided
into two chambers.
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The
upper chamber consists of
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turbine
and
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electricity
generator and the bottom chamber takes in the water from
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waves
.
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The
wave-energy
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machine
is somewhat submerged in the sea to take in the water that
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comes
from
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waves
. This causes the increase in the water level inside the
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machine
which in effect pushes the remaining
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air
upwards. This
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air
flow causes the blades of the
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turbines
to rotate. The placement of blades
as well
as inlets and outlets of
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air
is done
in such a way that all the
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air
flow
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helps
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turbine
to rotate faster. The inlet of
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air
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entring
the
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machine
from top is on the
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left
side of the
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machine
and the
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air
traveled through the
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machine
from bottom exits from the right side of the
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machine
.
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The
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turbine
is connected
to the
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electricity
generator that produces
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electricity
from the rotation of turbine.

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The
placement of this wave-energy
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machine
can
be done
is
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different
ways which is
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explained
in the second diagram.
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The
diagram says that placing the wave-energy
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machine
close to shore is cheaper compared to far in the ocean
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because
of the installation costs while the
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waves
near shore are smaller compared to far in the ocean. One
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important
point shown in the diagram is that
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small
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waves
causes low
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electricity
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out
than large waves.

This concludes that the decision of selecting the location for installation of wave-energy
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machine
is based
on a trade-off between installation costs and energy outputs.
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IELTS academic he diagrams below show the design for a wave-energy machine and its location.

Academic
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