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The map illustrates the changes that have occured in Templeton, a sidesea resort, over a 10 a year period beginning in 1990 and ending in 2005. v.2

The map illustrates the changes that have occured in Templeton, a sidesea resort, over a 10 a year period beginning in 1990 and ending in 2005. v. 2
The changes over 10 years of a coast resort, Templeton, from 1990 to 2005 are showed in the map. Overall, there are extensive developments with regards to construction of buildings and facilities by cut down the trees. Transport system has significant changes in Templeton. A seaport has been built on south-east side of the town that passed through by railway. This railway continues along the beach and cross the river over a new bridge. Meanwhile, in the north part beside the river, an airport was constructed. There is building has built for industrial purpose such as a factory on the west side of the railway station. Another building for commercial purpose is supermarket put up along the new road on the west side of the town. The residential also has a lot changes, showed by condo was replaced house along the beach and lake, and there are some new house opposite the supermarket and hospital.
The
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changes
over 10 years of a coast resort, Templeton, from 1990 to 2005 are
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showed
in the map.
Overall
, there are extensive developments
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with regards to
construction of buildings and facilities by
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cut
down the trees.

Transport system has significant
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changes
in Templeton. A seaport has
been built
on south-east side of the town that passed through by railway. This railway continues along the beach and cross the river over a new bridge. Meanwhile, in the north part beside the river, an airport
was constructed
.

There is building has built for industrial purpose such as a factory on the west side of the railway station. Another building for commercial purpose is supermarket put up along the new road on the west side of the town.

The residential
also
has a lot
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changes
,
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showed
by condo
was replaced
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house
along the beach and lake, and there are
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some
new
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house
opposite the supermarket and hospital.
2Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes
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IELTS academic The map illustrates the changes that have occured in Templeton, a sidesea resort, over a 10 a year period beginning in 1990 and ending in 2005. v. 2

Academic
  American English
4 paragraphs
155 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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