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The maps below show changes that took place in Youngsville in New Zealand over a 25-year period from 1980 to 2005 v.2

The maps below show changes that took place in Youngsville in New Zealand over a 25-year period from 1980 to 2005 v. 2
The map illustrate the developement of Youngsville in new Zealand throughout the period between 1980 and 2005. As can be seen, a significant amount of green spaces were cut down to make room for others facilities. The most noticable changes is that all of the trees in the South of Alana river have been replaced by factories and warehouses. furthermore, to the right corner, rows of houses and green area was demolished and substituted by skyscraper and storing places. A new extension of railroad was built running straight north. To the north of Youngsville, residential area near the river were turned into stadium and parking spaces. Only a small number of trees were still remained to the north of the river. The woodland were cleared to make way for the park. Likewise, a lot more activities were organized on the lake to the north of the map. Overall, the area was significantly transformed over 25 years.
The map
illustrate
the
developement
of
Youngsville
in
new Zealand
throughout the period between 1980 and 2005. As can be
seen
, a significant amount of green spaces were
cut
down to
make
room for others facilities.

The most
noticable
changes
is that
all of the
trees in the South of Alana river have
been replaced
by factories and warehouses.
furthermore
, to the right corner, rows of
houses
and green area
was demolished
and substituted by skyscraper and storing places. A new extension of railroad
was built
running straight north.

To the north of
Youngsville
, residential area near the river
were turned
into stadium and parking spaces.
Only
a
small
number of trees were
still
remained to the north of the river. The woodland
were cleared
to
make
way for the park.
Likewise
, a lot more activities
were organized
on the lake to the north of the map.

Overall
, the area was
significantly
transformed over 25 years.
4Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
9Mistakes

IELTS academic The maps below show changes that took place in Youngsville in New Zealand over a 25-year period from 1980 to 2005 v. 2

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156 words
6.0
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