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The charts below shows the percentage of water used for different purposes in six area of the world. Summarize the information by selecting the main features and make comparison where relevant. v.2

The charts below shows the percentage of water used for different purposes in six area of the world.
The six pie graph depict the diverse usage of water in six regions of the earth. Overall, while in North America and Europe, industry is the main consumer of water, in other areas water is used in agriculture more than other purpose. In addition the percentage of water used for agriculture in central Asia is more than the like purpose in other areas. Europe by more 50% of water resource is the first region whereas central Asia apply just 5% of water resource in industry. In addition, in Europe just 32% of water is consumed by agricultural activity, which it is less than any other area. Consumption patter in North America is so close to Europe by, 48%, 39% and 13% for industrial, agricultural and domestic purposes respectively. The lowest usage of water in domestic activity, belong to central Asia and south east Asia (7%), south America but use more than 19% of water resource, highest amount for this purpose among the so-called regions. Although in Africa percentage of agricultural usage of water is less than central Asia by 84%, percentage two other purpose is more than Asia by 2%.
The six pie graph depict the diverse usage of
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in six regions of the earth.

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, in
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. In
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central Asia
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Europe by more 50% of
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resource is the
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central Asia
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resource in industry.
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, in Europe
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32% of
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area. Consumption patter in North America is
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close to Europe by, 48%, 39% and 13% for industrial, agricultural and domestic
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respectively
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The lowest usage of
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in domestic activity, belong to
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south America
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more than 19% of
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among the
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-called regions. Although in Africa percentage of agricultural usage of
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central Asia
by 84%, percentage two
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is more than Asia by 2%.
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IELTS academic The charts below shows the percentage of water used for different purposes in six area of the world.

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