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The maps below show the changes experienced by the town of Horton at the beginning of the 21st Century v.2

The maps below show the changes experienced by the town of Horton at the beginning of the 21st Century v. 2
The maps illustrate both an old Horton in 2008 as well as a new town, that has been completely changed by few years until 2016. Overall, significant changes were occurred with all parts of the Horton. While the major settings in the west-north territory were repurposed and overhauled, both north-east and south-east area has seen demolishing and sites, that were changed in scales. Firstly, woodland and lake were reduced in size, where forest now is only in the north-east part and lake has been decreased to a pond by the year 2016. Meanwhile, industrial complex has only increased, by this reason, it took a large part in the sought-east of the area, even demolishing residential area at all. Secondly, not only expansion of settings was done, but also repurposing of the big district in the north-west of horton. Evidently, as we can see, the overhaul was took not as big role as the rearrangement. Reconstruction was done to arts centre, which has become a multi-screen cinema, as well as residential area has changed to a shopping centre by the year 2016 in Horton. clearly, derelict warehouses were overhauled to a car park in the north, which is near the offices and university, these were repurposed from an old town. < br>
The maps illustrate both an
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old
Horton in 2008
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as well as
a new town, that has been completely
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changed
by few years until 2016.

Overall
, significant
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changes
were occurred
with all parts of the Horton. While the major settings in the west-north territory
were repurposed
and overhauled, both north-east and south-east
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area
has
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seen
demolishing and sites, that were
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changed
in scales.

Firstly
, woodland and lake were
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reduced
in size, where forest
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now
is
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only
in the north-east part and lake has
been decreased
to a pond by the year 2016. Meanwhile, industrial complex has
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only
increased, by this reason, it took a large part in the sought-east of the
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area
, even demolishing residential
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area
at all.

Secondly
, not
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only
expansion of settings
was done
,
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but
also
repurposing of the
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big
district in the north-west of
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horton
.
Evidently
, as we can
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see
, the overhaul was
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took
not as
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big
role as the rearrangement. Reconstruction
was done
to
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arts
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centre
, which has become a multi-screen cinema,
as well
as residential
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area
has
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changed
to a shopping
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centre
by the year 2016 in Horton.
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clearly
, derelict warehouses
were overhauled
to a car park in the north, which is near the offices and university, these
were repurposed
from an
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old
town.

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IELTS academic The maps below show the changes experienced by the town of Horton at the beginning of the 21st Century v. 2

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211 words
5.5
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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